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Entomological evidence collection

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I've listed this article for peer review because this article has some issues, and I'm looking for how to fix them.

Thanks, ABrundage, Texas A&M University (talk) 02:15, 2 April 2008 (UTC)

• The article needs an appropriate lead section. Follow that link for more details on how to write one, but basically the lead section provides the context for a reader that doesn't know much or anything about the subject to get the basic idea. The first or first couple sentences should start with an accurate definition of the topic. The lead section in general should properly summarize all the most important aspects of a topic. Thus it is a bit like a good abstract in a research paper. 2) It's hard to describe how, but the writing style doesn't follow encyclopedic writing conventions. It's self-referential for one, for another it is prescriptive: "it is imperative to take..." for example. Encyclopedia articles should be descriptive and give facts and cited opinions only. They should not give recommendations. This article gives tons of them. Also, I agree with the comments on the talk page, the article needs to be connected to other articles on Wikipedia. Read through it and find the important concepts in each paragraph and try to find the Wikipedia articles to link to. See my edit for examples. I don't know how to define the topic, so my edit to the lead section will need to be improved. - Taxman ^Talk 22:45, 2 April 2008 (UTC)