Wikipedia:Peer review/Earl Warren/archive1

Earl Warren

I have requested a peer review for this article because I would like to improve the article to GA status and am looking for helpful advice on what needs improving.

Thanks,

Wikipediatoperfection (talk) 21:12, 19 December 2007 (UTC)

Review by Twelsht

I didn't have time to read this article thoroughly. But after skimming it, a couple of things caught my eye. Watch out for MOS issues. Your standard (American) use of quotation marks doesn't conform to Wikipedia style. This is one of the first things that will catch the eye of a reviewer on the GAC. It's also a good idea to avoid overlinking, a temptation to which I've often succumbed. If I remember correctly, most of your links were perfectly appropriate. But you probably don't need to link terms such as "district attorney," which are familiar to most native speakers of English. At a glance, the piece looks fairly comprehensive. I'll take a closer look tomorrow. Best, -- twelsht (talk) 05:48, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

After a closer reading, the article still looks reasonably comprehensive. On the whole, it's well written and well organized. A couple issues concerned me, however. I was confused by the extended reference to Bestor Robinson. The article noted that Robinson was a conservationist and an avid rock climber, but there was no effort to link this information to Warren. Did Robinson influence Warren's views on conservationism? If so, this needs to be stated. A second concern is the absence of inline citations, an omission that won't be difficult to rectify. There should be plenty of available online sources dealing with this prominent figure. Again, the article is fairly comprehensive. It would be stronger if the material were supported with references, preferably inline citations. I made a couple of minor style edits, all of which include edit summaries. (Be aware of Wikipedia's guidelines for punctuation.) I've also found that it's best to avoid highlighting partial dates, e.g., 1946. That said, I've come across exceptions to this rule in some sports articles, e.g., 1915. Where I encountered similar links in this article, I left them alone. Overall, this piece shouldn't be difficult to upgrade to GA standards. The most pressing issue, in my view, is a need for inline citations. I hope this helps! Thanks, again, for your feedback! -- twelsht (talk) 19:08, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

One last thing: You could note that many historians connect Warren's regrets over his support for Japanese-American internment to his later commitment to civil rights. If I remember correctly, this observation is made in James T. Patterson's Brown v. Board of Education: A Civil Rights Milestone and Its Troubled Legacy. Best, -- twelsht (talk) 13:20, 21 December 2007 (UTC)

Review by Dweller

If you read this at the main WP:PR page, scroll up a tad and see the comments I make about the Name of Turkey article. Almost all of this article is unreferenced. That's the first and best thing you can work on to improve it. --Dweller (talk) 15:39, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

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