Wikipedia:Peer review/Dulquer Salmaan/archive1

Dulquer Salmaan

I've listed this article for peer review because I plan to make this a good article and would like some constructive advice.

Thanks a lot, JosephJames 07:57, 17 July 2016 (UTC)

Redtigerxyz's comments

Comparing with GA Shahid Kapoor

• This article is a WP:QUOTEFARM. Use the quotes even if the same can not be said by a paraphrase.
• The text is repetitive in some places: "He next starred in Anwar Rasheed's Ustad Hotel (2012) in which he starred alongside Thilakan and Nithya Menen".
• State the following facts about each of his roles: Film name, year, 1-liner summary of his character and the plot, any special efforts to essay the character (e.g. "For the role, he shaved his head and learned to speak in a Kashmiri dialect" from Shahid article), reviews, commercial success/fail, awards.
• "becoming the first ever actor to receive the award two times in the same category" is not supported by the reference.
• Each reference should have this minimum info: Author, date, Web link (if any), Publisher/Newspaper (e.g. The Hindu).
  • Example where missing: "Anchu Sundarikal Movie Review". The Times Of India.
• Not sure if filmbeat.com is a RS.--Redtigerxyz ^Talk 11:25, 19 July 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the comment Redtigerxyz! I am working on it. Could you give me other instances where the text is repetitive? Also, I believe Filmibeat is a reliable source. It was used in Loham. Expecting your help further. JosephJames 13:41, 19 July 2016 (UTC)

• Repetitive text examples:
  • "Dulquer's performance was appreciated"
  • "was a commercial failure/success"
• "The film garnered critical acclaim and became Dulquer's fifth consecutive commercial success in two years"; 2 problems:
  • "fifth consecutive commercial success in two years" is not supported by ref
  • The ref only talks about week 1 collections, which can be used to proclaim it a hit overall.--Redtigerxyz ^Talk 17:37, 19 July 2016 (UTC)

Redtigerxyz: Sorry that I couldn't attend to your comments. I am having some network issues. Could you please help me in improving the article by editing it? I hadn't noticed the repetitive text and the overuse of quotes earlier. I hope you can help me. JosephJames 04:44, 23 July 2016 (UTC)

Comments from Charles Turing

• In the entire article, the actor is referred by the name "Dulquer", it has to be his last name "Salmaan".
• The 3rd para in the lead is the continuation of 2nd. Is it necessary to divide them.
• In the body, "Dulquer" is used in a number of times in every para, instead of his/he/him.
• Lead reads: he "predominantly appears in Malayalam films". Then why there is a column for language in filmography. The only two Tamil credits can be moved to Notes.
• You removed the In the media section citing as just random info. If it was about the placement, then you can re-add that under "Awards" (as prose), changing the title as "Awards and recognitions".
• Keep a uniform referencing style. Some references are missing date and author.
• Article should go through a copyedit from WP:GOCE.

--Charles Turing (talk) 14:57, 24 July 2016 (UTC)

Thanks Charles Turing! A few suggestions though. I think the language column in the filmography should be kept. The info in the 'In the media' section is tough to add into the "Awards" section. I think it can be added later maybe. I am working on the references. JosephJames 14:44, 25 July 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for yor comments. I'm closing the PR. Please feel free to post further suggestions on my talk page. JosephJames 14:39, 28 July 2016 (UTC)