Wikipedia:Peer review/Dr Pepper Ballpark/archive1
Dr Pepper Ballpark edit
This article concerning a minor league ballpark in Texas recently became a good article. I have found little regarding what a stadium article should be in order to become featured, and I was hoping that this peer review could help me to gain more perspective on the article (as all peer reviews do). I anxiously await any input and thank you in advance for your aid. — Scm83x hook 'em 22:26, 30 July 2006 (UTC)
- For an article with as many mentions of architectural awards it is surprising how little description is given to the structure's architecture. The article lists a handful of features (the existence of luxury suites, location of the bull pens, and location of a pool) but fails to include a description of the overall style or theme of the ballpark (does the ballpark have a retro theme, futuristic styling, ...?). There also needs to be a mention of what other types of events are held besides baseball games. --Allen3 talk 16:16, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- I am still working on getting a picture of the stadium, so that will make the architectural description easier. There are several architecture descriptions online that can be well used ("park within a park", etc.). In close proximity to the stadium is Pizza Hut Park, which is where all of the concert type events seem to go on in Frisco because it has a built in concert stage. Like most baseball seasons, it is used almost every day during the season, and the offseason is winter, so an outdoor venue is less usable. It seems as though it is used for the Texas Amateur Athletic Federation's Winter Games, patterned after the Olympics for amateur athletes. I'll get to adding these things, including taking the picture. — Scm83x hook 'em 16:39, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- As I've been expanding a stadium article recently, I'd be interested to see how this one develops. Some points:
- There's a couple of bits which are confusing to non-American or non-baseball following readers. What is a Class AA baseball team? Is there an article which can be linked to the term? "ranking it fourth overall in all minor league attendance for the year" - Does this mean US minor league baseball teams, all US sports or something else?
- I've linked Class AA to minor league baseball in the lead so that the concept is less confusing to international readers. I also disambiguated the statement about overall attendance by clarifying "fourth overall in all minor league baseball attendance". — Scm83x hook 'em 05:22, 1 August 2006 (UTC)
- A thorough copyedit would be beneficial. For example, the ballpark did not lose the first event in April 2003, the team playing in it did. There are quite a few redundant words. If all uses of "additionally" were removed from the article, the meaning would not change.
- Is there an area known for being where the most vociferous fans congregate? What type of seating is used - is it covered or open-air?
- I have now uploaded an image of the park's facade and inside. From the image, you can see that seating is open-air. All of this will be discussed in the architectural design section I will add soon. There is no particularly vociferous section, by the way. — Scm83x hook 'em 05:22, 1 August 2006 (UTC)
- What is the attendance for a typical game? Oldelpaso 20:43, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- There's a couple of bits which are confusing to non-American or non-baseball following readers. What is a Class AA baseball team? Is there an article which can be linked to the term? "ranking it fourth overall in all minor league attendance for the year" - Does this mean US minor league baseball teams, all US sports or something else?
Article update: I have added the new architectural design section and requested a copyedit from a very good grammarian friend. — Scm83x hook 'em 07:51, 2 August 2006 (UTC)