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De La Salle-College of Saint Benilde

This article has maintained its GA status for almost a year, and is relatively stable with minimal vandalism for the past two years. I've listed this article for peer review to seek feedback on what changes should be done or what else should be improved in order to enhance the article further.

Thanks,

Mithril Cloud 08:36, 5 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

PR

As per WP:UNI article guidelines, the following are suggested changes that could be made to the article:

Student Services section is not notable. Most universities have similar forms of student services and are pretty much compulsory, especially in US and UK.
Listing of the names of student organizations is unnecessary and once again, are unnotable. If you want to expand on the student organizations, try to focus on events/contributions that were covered by verifiable sources, like charity events, record-breaking, award ceremonies, etc.
School Seal section is unremarkable. You should try to merge that into the History section.
Campus section comes before the Academics section
Your article lacks demographics information. Such information should be included in the Academics and Demographics section.
Your article lacks a separate Research and Endowment section. It is not necessarily important, but it is generally good to have one.
WP:LEAD states that you should summarize the entire article's key points into the lead. It only looks like the university's history is in the lead at the moment.

Feel free to let me know if you have any questions or comments regarding my PR, or if any of my comments were unclear, please let me know and I'll be happy to clear things up a bit. - Jameson L. Tai ^{talk ♦ contribs} 22:13, 5 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

PR Commentary

Student Services section is not notable. Most universities have similar forms of student services and are pretty much compulsory, especially in US and UK.

Will work on it by taking the section out.

Listing of the names of student organizations is unnecessary and once again, are unnotable. If you want to expand on the student organizations, try to focus on events/contributions that were covered by verifiable sources, like charity events, record-breaking, award ceremonies, etc.

Will work on it by replacing the names with quick descriptive summaries of the types of organizations.

School Seal section is unremarkable. You should try to merge that into the History section.

Will take the section out if it fails to fit in the History section.

Campus section comes before the Academics section

Correction done.

Your article lacks demographics information. Such information should be included in the Academics and Demographics section.

No published articles about demographics can be found at present.

Your article lacks a separate Research and Endowment section. It is not necessarily important, but it is generally good to have one.

Same as above. Articles about any possible research done is scarce.

WP:LEAD states that you should summarize the entire article's key points into the lead. It only looks like the university's history is in the lead at the moment.

The lead already summarizes the History, Campus, Academics, and Athletics sections. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mithril Cloud (talk • contribs) 13:11, 7 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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