Wikipedia:Peer review/Cheyenne, Wyoming/archive1

Cheyenne, Wyoming edit

I think the article could undergo improvement and make it to a featured article. It looks like it really needs attention. Retiono Virginian 16:03, 25 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

My 2 cents:

This article really needs work, so keep it from FAC for a while.
I'm going to suggest very swooping changes, and then I'll nitpick later. I ask, though, that you post a message on my talk page notifiying me that the changes I have suggested are implemented.
Get a disambig for the Cheyenne, a native people of the Americas.
Expand lead per WP:LEAD.
Get a citation for that population number. You may want further verification, because population is not a static number.
In the History section, surely native peoples settled the area before Europeans?
Please reconsider the little right-side picture gallery. I suggest removing them all to find more relevant pictures to the section such as pictures of miners, the Cheyenne, early settlers, '49ers, etc. The amount of possibilities for pictures there is endless, but the pictures you have there is a waste of Kb.
Please get citations for your Union-Pacific "story."
Expand "Geography" to include information about the terrain and a picture of the landscape THERE would be appropriate.
Please cite the census numbers. It really shouldn't be hard.
Major cleanup to the "Other Info" section. It screams "HELP ME!"
It's written 9-acre.
Citation for the Philip K. Dick book mention, please.
Get flags for the sister cities.
Notable people can be dead, you know. There are more. And usually notable people have articles, not just red links.
IN-LINE CITATIONS, PLEASE!

Hope this will help. Feel free to contact me or yell at me if I've misinterpreted. Evan^{(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!)} 23:25, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]