Wikipedia:Peer review/Charlie Stubbs/archive1

Charlie Stubbs edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because…

I have split the article from a list and established it's notability by including sourced real-world content.

Thanks, Tellow (talk) 06:46, 14 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • There are several very short paragraphs (one- or two-sentence long) throughout this article. Aside from being an aesthetic negative, they make the reading experience choppy. Some parts (mostly Storylines) are also jarring as the context of an idea presented in a short paragraph has gaps in its linkage to the next point. The short paragraphs should be re-worked, merging them together or into other paragraphs. The bridges between the ideas should also be established; avoid making the reader wonder what happened in between or why the article is jumping from idea to idea. Of course, these bridges should not be of superfluous and trivial details. It might be that some sourced items would be out of place anywhere and might have to be deleted, which is perfectly fine since Wikipedia is a discriminate source of information (not everything that can be sourced should be written of). The lede of this article is also too short (one sentence). It should summarise the entire article; hence, it should give a very brief rundown on who Charlie Stubbs is, how he was conceived and received (see WP:LEDE). Last point, taking a screenshot of a copyrighted work does not give you copyrights over the underlying work; File:Charliestubbs.jpg cannot solely be released by you as "free" content (see commons:Commons:Derivative works). Jappalang (talk) 08:18, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]