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I've listed this article for peer review because it is an important and relevant medical topic which I would like to see to GA status after having started the article. Present concerns that need help and advice include spelling and grammar, flow, general coherence and clarity, simplicity of language (use of technical language), and structural adherence to WP:MOS and WP:MEDMOS. Also some sections may be underdeveloped, while some may be overdone? I am at odds and fresh minds are needed. I would really appreciate suggestions and help. Thanks, Ochiwar (talk) 07:37, 4 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Per WP:BODY, there are far too many brief sections: "Very short or very long sections and subsections in an article look cluttered and inhibit the flow of the prose." Praemonitus (talk) 14:35, 21 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for your comment. I have merged quite a bit, changed sections to bullet lists where appropriate, and you are right: it does seem to flow much better. But, too many bullet lists and too little prose? Ochiwar (talk) 09:09, 22 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Anticipatory is pretty much a subsection of chemotherapy as the phenomenon is entirely related to it, so the two should be merged or at the very least placed adjacent to one another. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:50, 27 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Thanks, makes sense. Moved ANV to be under CINV. The only reason I did not merge both sections as suggested is because there is no seperate article on ANV, so I am thinking that as long as it has a subsection in this article, at least anybody searching for the term will end up on the subsection ANV in this article. Ochiwar (talk) 20:55, 28 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Article is looking much better. Still requires some basic copyediting (spelling; punctuation). Also, is there another image that we could use? I am pretty sure the reason for the depicted vomiting is not cancer... it could be, but it's not been in my experience a common theme amongst renaissance art. LT90001 (talk) 14:33, 2 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am reading this very interesting article and wondering if some patients might report nausea when they have a foul taste in their mouth?
Chemotherapy and nausea. What is the mechanism? I know that persons undergoing chemotherapy often report foul tastes in their mouth/bad breath. Is this part of the nausea? I am not sure if these represent genuine symptoms (i.e. pulmonary excretion of the drug or its metabolites or secretion into the saliva) or chemosensory dysfunctions such as dysgeusia.
Radiotherapy to the major salivary glands commonly reduces salivary flow rate, leading to dry mouth (xerostomia). Xerostomia is again linked to complaints of foul taste (e.g. metalic)/bad breath, and this mechanism again might be genuine or phantom. Lesion (talk) 14:49, 4 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From the lead section, paragraph 1: "Cancer and nausea are associated in about fifty percent of people affected by cancer." The sentence is rather awkward, probably because of the attempt to shoehorn the article's title in. How about "Nausea is associated with cancer in about 50% of people with cancer." Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:57, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From the lead section, paragraph 1: "While seventy to eighty percent of people undergoing chemotherapy experience nausea and/or vomiting, they may also occur in people not receiving treatment." Non-treatment related nausea was mentioned in the preceding sentence. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:59, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From the lead section, paragraph 1: "Nausea and vomiting may be experienced as the most distressful side effects of cytotoxic drugs and may result in patients delaying or refusing further radiotherapy or chemotherapy." Side-effects from cytotoxic drugs lead to patients refusing radiotherapy? Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:01, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From the lead section, paragraph 1: "Some medical conditions associated with a high risk of nausea and/or vomiting include chemotherapy and radiotherapy induced nausea and vomiting, anticipatory nausea and vomiting and malignant bowel obstruction." Chemotherapy/radiotherapy-induced nausea and vomiting are associated with a high risk of nausea and/or vomiting? Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:34, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From "Causes", paragraph 1: "These include malignant bowel obstruction (MBO), chemotherapy induced nausea and vomiting (CINV), anticipatory nausea and vomiting (ANV), and radiotherapy induced nausea and vomiting (RINV)." The phrases "chemotherapy-induced nausea and vomiting" and "radiotherapy-induced nausea and vomiting" should include hyphens. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:40, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]