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California State Polytechnic University, Pomona

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because… I intend to nominate it for FA and I'd like to hear some feedback.

Thank you, Marco Guzman, Jr  Chat  15:52, 15 September 2011 (UTC)

Comments from Nikkimaria

• See here for a list of potentially problematic links
• WP:OVERLINK: don't link very common terms like United States, and don't link the same terms multiple times
• Avoid vague time statements like "in recent years" where possible
• Spell out numbers under 10
• Check punctuation throughout, particularly hyphens/dashes
• Prose in general is a bit dense and inaccessible to non-specialist readers
• When a measurement is being used as an adjective, be sure to employ the adjective parameter of the convert template
• Spell out "%" in article text
• Don't use contractions outside of direct quotes
• What is "water intrusion"? "sense of arrival"? Check for potentially unfamiliar terms and phrases
• Don't italicize organizations, languages, etc
• Be consistent in whether you use hyphens, dashes or slashes when notating an academic or fiscal year
• Citation(s) for Pep Band section, Rose Parade section?
• Don't link terms in See also already linked in article text
• No citations to Powell 1956. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:33, 27 September 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for the comments Nikkimaria, I'll work on them ASAP. -- Marco Guzman, Jr  Talk  15:50, 29 September 2011 (UTC)