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Basketball Association of America

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I've listed this article for peer review because it failed GA twice and I am getting nowhere, the cycle counties. To get this to GA i deiced that peer review would be the best.

Thanks, Leave Message, Yellow Evan home

• As pointed out in the GA review, there are many book sources that are usable. In a very short time I found several good sources which spoke about all kinds of things in the league from arena conditions, to african american players in the league, to behind the scene conflicts, to how the league used players from the NBL to help bolster it and keep it alive. All of that is very useful information in improving the article.--Crossmr (talk) 01:02, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

• To get to GA, the article must be expanded to include most if not all info provided by the available sources.—Chris!_c/t 06:07, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, but I agree that it seems somewhat incomplete. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

• Dab finder finds one disambiguation link
• The lead is only one paragraph and should be expanded per WP:LEAD - My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
• The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself but the NHL / NFL / MLB stuff seems to only be in the lead.
• My general impression reading this is that it is not detailed enough - since almost all of the refs are online, I would look at n=more books and see what else can be found. For example, how did the ice rinks deal with basketball games (were there scheduling problems)? Or where did they get the teams / players from? Were most from other basketball leagues or from colleges or what? Surely more than one paragraph can be written on the second and third seasons?
• Article needs a copyedit - I read for comprehension, but noticed However, these arenas where often empty. (should be were, not where), and The best three teams from each division advance to the playoffs. (surely this should be in past tense)
• Avoid the use of words like "currently" as these can become out of date. So Currently known as the Detroit Pistons could be Known as the Detroit Pistons since 1957
• Is the league logo available for fair use as an image? How about images of some of the players?
• The second GAN has some useful comments on sources / books.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 05:04, 26 December 2009 (UTC)