Wikipedia:Peer review/Baby Gender Mentor/archive1

Baby Gender Mentor edit

I would appreciate any and all additional feedback on this article. The article has previously had a peer review which was very helpful. Following the peer review, and with some more work and discussion, the article was recognized as a Good Article. I've done some more work and reviewed the Featured Article criteria, and I believe the article now meets FA standards. Before submitting it for FA, I would like to solicit other opinions about what could be improved. I welcome your feedback on the article. Best, Johntex\^talk 05:47, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, a very good article. A couple small points:

Last paragraph in the lead needs citations.
Last paragraph in the "Accuracy of the test disputed" section needs some punctuation corrections.
Reword the opening few sentences in "About AcuGen." They don't flow well to me, since they both are so short. Maybe something like your opening, "AcuGen is a biotech company in Mass and is led by Cheng Wang, the company's President." Or something like that.

Other than that, to me, it meets all criteria of WP:WIAFA. Well written, comprehensive, stable, accurate, neutral.--NMajdan•talk 18:45, 8 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much Nmajdan. I will work on the above points. I am just about to finish reviewing University of Oklahoma for you. Johntex\^talk 03:30, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again, Nmajdan. I have now made the changes you suggest above. I am hopeful to receive additional comments if anyone has time. Johntex\^talk 05:29, 16 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]