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Antoine Samuel Adam-Salomon

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm curious to see how well I've conformed to Wikipedia guidelines, and want some constructive criticism on how to improve this article, as well as tips on how to become better at creating new articles in the future. Thanks!

Thanks, Scewing (talk) 08:14, 12 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Jappalang

The lede is a summary of the article; here, it should be expanded to give an overview of who is the subject and why was he notable (interesting to read about). The only sentence currently in the lede serves as a start. Add to it a summary of the information about his works from the main body text.

Compared to his photography, information about Adam-Solomon's sculptures seem lacking. Since he made "notable busts", perhaps some information can be found about them to expand the article's mention of them?

In my view, a biography should give an idea of the man beyond his work. How did he live? What did he think? Who was he (as a social figure)? The current article gives nothing about his life, just his work.

Formatting for the references/citations should be consistent. I spot "pp. 138" (which should be "p. 138") and "p138". Please follow one style or the other.

Capitalization of section headers should be treated as if the words are part of a normal sentence (see WP:Headings). I have changed the article to reflect this.

Quotations should not be in italics per the project's Manual of Style (MoS). Blockquotes should be used for long quotes. I have changed this in the article to fall in line with the MoS.

Links to Commons should be in a External links section, which is typically the last of any section. I have also changed this for the article.

Source for photographs should give more details to help re-users verify the image (the origin and copyright status). See WP:IUP and WP:CITE#IMAGE. In particular, File:Antoine Samuel Adam-Salomon self-portrait, c1860.png should state the inventory number for this photograph in the George Eastman House if there is no online link to it.

Overall, I think the article is a good start, and if additional information about Adam-Solomon can be found and added (from reliable sources), it could molded to be something better. Jappalang (talk) 07:36, 13 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]