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2011 Novak Djokovic tennis season edit

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It's the second time I nominate this article on the behalf of WikiProject Tennis for a peer review. It has been totally rewritten, discussed, shortened to fit in size limit, so basically tried everything to meet the requirements of the previous peer review. Please take your time to read it and give some advises to make it reach FA status.

Thanks folks, Lajbi ^{Holla @ me • CP} 17:37, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by --Sp33dyphil ©^hat_ontributions 03:37, 29 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"He didn't lose" Replace contraction. Please check throughout the article.
"The Wimbledon Championships and the US Open"
"Although his pace slowed by year's end, Djokovic only lost six matches, while winning seventy." --> "Although his pace slowed by year's end, Djokovic's remarkable win-loss ratio was six-seventy."
"43 match" hyphens -- normally they'd be two separate words/numbers, but in this case they're adjectives when working together. Same with "their head to head matchup"; please check throughout the article.
"US$12.6 million ~~dollars~~"
"but hit a ineffective" replace a with an.
"But Djokovic let Federer to gain control" omit to.
MOS encourages the inclusion of alt text.
Two dead links.
Please follow the "In/on [date], [text]" construction, where the comma goes after the date to separate two clauses.
References should go after punctuation.
Caption missing for infobox photo.
Magazine/newspaper titles should be italicised.
"3rd Greatest tennis" Why isn't "third greatest"?

Comments by Lemonade51 – Referencing looks to be a problem. Having said that, prose hasn't done itself any favours - this reads disjointed and can be easily expanded. The worrying thing is there are next to nothing quotes from Djokovic himself. What did he think about winning Wimbledon? Could he have done anything better this season? Does he think he has peaked? ~~What do ex-pros and current tennis stars think about Djokovic's season?~~ Has been answered I see.

For any BBC website you cite, you can leave the author parameter blank if not stated anywhere in the publication. Remove 'BBC Sports staff', change publisher to 'BBC' and add 'work' as 'BBC Sport'. I've done an example for you to do with the others.
Ref 4 published on guardian.co.uk not The Guardian newspaper. Similarly Ref 30 published on The Observer, not Guardian.
"Djokovic met Federer in the semifinals of Indian Wells...Djokovic quickly broke Federer...Djokovic did this...Djokovic likes to hear about Djokovic...", It does read tiresome. You do know you can refer to him as 'he'?
Under Miami Masters, "In the second half of March...", is that really the right terminology to use? – Lemonade51 (talk) 00:06, 31 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]