2009 Hopman Cup edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see what improvements need to be made in order for it to be of Featured List or Good Article standard (which ever is most appropriate).
Thanks, 03md 00:23, 10 January 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: I reviewed 2010 Hopman Cup a day or two ago, and many of the comments I made about that article apply to this one as well. This article does appear to be a cross between an article and a list. My inclination would be to develop it as an article by adding a good deal more text. Here are some suggestions (mostly in the form of questions) about text expansion and also about prose and Manual of style issues.
- 2009 Sony Ericsson Open, a GA-level article about tennis, might be a useful model to look at for possible kinds of text expansion.
- I would consider creating a more elaborate infobox that includes more information and possibly an image.
- Would it be worthwhile to add some background information about the players who took part in the tournament?
- The word "they" in the second sentence of the second paragraph seems to refer to "nations" in the first sentence of the second paragraph, when it actually refers to "teams".
- The image caption does not quite make sense to me. It says, "Dominika Cibulkova won the Slovakia's third Hopman Cup for Slovakia for the third time. She was partnered by Dominik Hrbaty, who won the competition for the second time." Cibulkova didn't win all three cups by herself; she and Hrbaty won this one together, if I'm understanding correctly. Did he win another cup with someone else in another year? Did she win her other two with one or two different people in other years? If she won three times, and he won twice, and they only shared one of these, doesn't that still add up to four cups for Slovakia?
- Could the lead include details about Perth, the venue for the matches, the courts, the referees, the audience? Should it include the span of the tournament rather than just the starting date? Should the names of the winning pair be included? How did teams other than Chinese Taipai qualify? Can you provide background on the Hopman Cup? How did it get started? Is it always held in Perth? Where did the "Hopman" part of the name come from? Are the players professionals or amateurs? If professional, how are they rewarded for playing or for winning? Were the matches televised? How many people attended, and how many (if any) watched on TV? In the world of tennis, how important is the Hopman Cup? What kind of tournament is this, singles, doubles, or what?
- Should the "Asian Hopman Cup" be briefly explained? Who plays in it besides Chinese Taipai?
- In the "Australia vs. Germany" table, it appears that two women play a singles match, two men play a singles match, and then two couples play a doubles match. Should text be added to make this more clear? The columns need labels. What do 1, 2, and 3 in the first row of this table stand for? What is the meaning of numbers like 62? How is it possible to tell which team, Australia or Germany, won by looking at the table?
- What does "retired" mean in the "Germany vs. Slovakia" table?
- The names of newspapers and magazines in the Reference section should appear in italics.
- The last-name first arrangement of "Quartermaine, Braden" in citation 32 looks correct, but shouldn't the Barry Wood citations be Wood, Barry?
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 02:37, 12 January 2011 (UTC)