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Grand Hotel, Birmingham edit

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Result: Delist I actually thought this might be an easy fix, but it requires someone with a bit more knowledge and motivation. It has had plenty of time to be worked on and it has only received minor edits since the nomination. AIRcorn (talk) 06:32, 11 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article had a number of grammatical errors, some of which I've corrected [1], but I'm not sure I got all. Some sentences like " Hickmet Hotels took lease of the hotel in 1972, and even after a £500,00 refurbishment, trading conditions proved difficult, and they fell into receivership in 1976" I don't quite understand enough to fix--what does it mean that "trading conditions proved difficult" for a hotel? Is the refurbishment amount meant to be 50,000? Also, if "they" refers to the company "Hickmet Hotels", it should be written as "it" or "the company".

The language also appears to me in places non-neutral in tone: " rich and impressive Louis XIV style decoration", "and the grand staircase will be restored to their former glory".

This seems to me an article that can be brought back up to GA status without too much work, but I don't believe it's there at the moment. Notifying the relevant parties. -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:48, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The lead is choppy, and such phrases as "restored to their former glory" don't cut it, even with a source. Further comments are forthcoming. dci | TALK 03:37, 23 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]