Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Toni Braxton discography/archive1

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The list was promoted by Giants2008 21:12, 21 October 2011 [1].

Toni Braxton discography edit

Featured list candidates/Toni Braxton discography/archive1

Nominator(s): Novice7 (talk) 12:38, 24 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I think it now meets the criteria. (I developed this article in my sandbox first.) I have formatted the tables per WP:ACCESS (Please do let me know if the current format is awful. I didn't follow the WP:DISCOGSTYLE format on this discography.), added sources for chart positions, sales et cetera. Thanks in advance for your comments, Novice7 (talk) 12:38, 24 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Jimknut (talk) 20:10, 5 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Some suggestions:

" ... twenty-one music videos. Her mother, an opera vocalist ..." > I just think something should go in between these two sentences. Possible example: "Braxton was born in [state] in [year]."

"The song failed to chart; however, Toni Braxton's voice caught the attention of producers" > "Although the song failed to chart, Braxton's voice caught the attention of producers"

"In 1991, Braxton recorded songs for the soundtrack album of 1992 film Boomerang starring Eddie Murphy" > "In 1991, Braxton recorded songs for the soundtrack album of the 1992 Eddie Murphy film, Boomerang."

"Toni Braxton, the album, has sold about ten million copies worldwide." > " The album sold over ten million copies worldwide." (We already know it's self-titled album, plus "about" seems too vague)

"It also cracked the top-ten in many other countries including Canada, Germany, the Netherlands, Switzerland and the UK." > How about "made" or "reached" rather than "cracked"?

"... became Braxton's first number one single in the US" > Spell out "US" as "United States" here and elsewhere in the introduction. Likewise, spell out "UK" as "United Kingdom".

"It also charted within the top ten in countries like Canada, where it topped the Canadian Albums Chart, France, Germany, the Netherlands, Switzerland and the UK." > What country is "like Canada"? How about saying "it topped the charts in Canada, France ..." or "It topped the Canadian Albums Chart and also the charts in ..."?

The lead single "He Wasn't Man Enough" became another top-five hit in the US for Braxton and the second single "Just Be a Man About It" became a top-ten R&B hit." > What chart was it a top-five hit on? Also, put commas before and after the song titles (i.e: ... single, "He Wasn't Man Enough", became...)

"The album charted within the top twenty in the US and received a gold certification in the US." > "In the United States the album charted in the top twenty and also received a gold certification." (Better not to have "United States" twice in one sentence.)

"... signed a record deal with Blackground Records. The first album release through Blackground, titled Libra, debuted at number four ..." > "... signed a record deal with Blackground Records. Libra, the first album release through them, debuted at number four ..."

"Later, in October 2008, it was announced that she had signed a record deal with Atlantic Records and her seventh studio album titled Pulse was released in May 2010." > "In October 2008 she signed a record deal with Atlantic Records. Pulse, her seventh studio album, was released in May 2010."

The lead single from the album "Yesterday", peaked at number twelve on the R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart." > " The lead single from the album, "Yesterday", peaked at number twelve on the R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart."

"With a career spanning over a decade..." > "In a career that has spanned nearly two decades..."

Change all the charts so that the font-size to all of them is 100%. Jimknut (talk) 22:40, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Addressed comments. Novice7 (talk) 07:21, 30 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support – Looks good. Jimknut (talk) 20:10, 5 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you Jimknut. Novice7 (talk) 06:12, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from — Status {^talk_contribs 21:23, 8 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A few comments

Compilation albums include greatest hits AND remix albums. They should be in the same section.
Box sets are not linked in the infobox.
I wouldn't say "Solo singles" is the proper to use for the singles, as some of them have guest spots, thus they are not "solo".
I don't see why there needs to be a "Music video appearances" section when it can just be a part of "Music videos".
Not too sure what the notes add to the article. For other charting, that's what separate articles are for.

— Status {^talk_contribs 01:44, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments Zach. I've fixed the first three issues. As for the fourth issue, I don't think they should be merged as I want the "featured" appearances to be separate. Featured singles and featured appearances. I hope you get what I mean. Now the last issue, well, I think the notes should stay. I was told in a previous FLC that even if songs/albums have separate articles, references or notes are needed to verify their existence in the discography. Novice7 (talk) 11:05, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support Everything looks good. :) — Status {^talk_contribs 21:23, 8 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you Status! Novice7 (talk) 12:02, 9 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 17:10, 4 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

The lead gives one of the songs as The Good Life, but our article is omitting The. I'd imagine we should follow what the primary article on that song calls it, assuming the article is accurate.\
Remove hyphen from "newly-formed".
More hyphen issues: one sentence has no hyphen in "top ten", but there is one in "top-five". This should be made consistent, no matter which way you go. Also, "top-ten" is hyphenated later, so there are multiple inconsistencies.
"which asked for a release from the contract." Since the contract itself hasn't been mentioned before (other than signing), I'd prefer seeing "her contract" or something similar.
"The album debuted at number two on Billboard 200 chart...". Missing "the" before Billboard?
Extended plays: Minor, but a comma would be nice after "previously unreleased track" in the third entry. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 00:33, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed/Done. Thanks for your comments Giants! Novice7 (talk) 11:47, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Compilation albums: Sales and Certs section serves no purpose as there is nothing listing. Please remove them.

Infobox says 21 music videos, i only count 20 with 4 appearances. Please address this.

~~- (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 00:28, 16 October 2011 (UTC)~~[reply]

Fixed and removed the two columns. Thank you for your comments Lakeshade. Novice7 (talk) 05:59, 16 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alright I'm not seeing any other issues so I will support this articles' promotion. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 01:46, 17 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much Lakeshade. Novice7 (talk) 04:03, 17 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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