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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Matthewedwards 05:45, 28 February 2009 [1].

NHL Foundation Player Award edit

Nominator(s): -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]], – Nurmsook!
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I am co-nominating with Nurmsook so that this can be resolved and have its promotion kepted. This article was just re-written by me and Nurmsook, and Scorpion0422 was the original editor and creator. Comments are welcome! -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 23:42, 15 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment: Sources, images, and prose look good. Disclaimer: I have the second-most edits to the page and I gave it a copyedit after Nurmsook and SRE.K.A.L.24's rewrite. Maxim(talk) 00:28, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I have the second-most edits to the page... What are you trying to say here? Thanks for that great copy-edit though! Disclaimer: 4 of your 6 edits were minors. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:36, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Truco

Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)

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  • The winner is given a grant of US$25,000 to further causes the winner supports. | I think 'help' would work better than further here.
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:45, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • No player has won the award twice, nor has any team twice been represented by winners. | --> 'No player has ever won the award twice, nor has any team been represented twice by winners.'
Done. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:45, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The award is closely related to the King Clancy Memorial Trophy, as only three of the eleven NHL Foundation Player Award winners—Darren McCarty, Marty Turco, and Joe Sakic—have failed to win the King Clancy Memorial Trophy in addition to their NHL Foundation Player Award. | (1)No need to state in addition to their NHL Foundation Player Award its repetitive of what was already stated earlier. (2)I still don't see how this NHL award is closely related with the King Trophy, a more thorough elaboration should be given or that statement should be removed.
Done your first request. I hope Nurmsook can reply to your second statement. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:45, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Done. – Nurmsook! talk... 01:03, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Notes
  • Note A | Reword to 'No award was presented due to the NHL 2004-05 Lockout.'
  • Note B | Remove the full stop, its not a complete sentence.
Done both. By the way, your username is too long, according to WP:SIGN. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:45, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

--<TRUCO> 503 00:38, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support | Problems resolved to meet WP:WIAFL. Thanks for letting me know about my signature.--TRUCO 02:18, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments - "as both are awarded to players who have made a significant humanitarian contribution to his community" doesn't seem gramatically correct ("players who have made (plural)....his (singular) community"), and ice hockey should surely be linked somewhere in the article? Other than that all looks good -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:38, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. – Nurmsook! talk... 17:24, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
In that case I am happy to support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:48, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs) Excellent job, considering the speed in which this article was brought to quality standards.

  • "Winners have often made large charitable contributions to their community prior to being awarded." It is unclear that these contributions have led to the players' winning the award. Maybe "Winners have often won the award as a result of their large charitable contributions to before being awarded."
I'll let Nurmsook reply to this comment of yours. -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:16, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "German Olaf Kolzig is the only non-Canadian winner, while Ron Francis is the only winner to have been elected to the Hockey Hall of Fame." "while"-->and.
Is this necessary? -- [[SRE.K.A.L.|L.A.K.ERS]] 00:16, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dabomb87 (talk) 23:43, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 23:43, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It seems as though Maxim took care of these, because these quotes are not the same as what's actually written in the article. Regardless, all have been addressed! – Nurmsook! talk... 00:21, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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