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The list was promoted by User:Scorpion0422 22:51, 13 December 2008 [1].

List of Kirby media

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This list is based off of List of Castlevania titles, List of Harvest Moon titles, List of F-Zero media, and other video game featured lists. This is my first FLC, but I believe that the list is up to the FL criteria. All concerns will most likely be reviewed by me, and have a good time reviewing it. -- Nomader (Talk) 23:23, 1 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:23, 8 December 2008 (UTC) [reply]
Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)

Comments Oppose The lead is not large enough, please see List of One Piece video games as a guide. Also, Featured Lists no longer start "This is a list of..." anymore. Dabomb87 (talk) 23:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • "This and other subtle changes in gameplay" Changes from what?
  • Re-worded the sentence for clarity.
  • "The games have been developed by Japanese based HAL Laboratory"-->The games have been developed by Japan-based HAL Laboratory...
  • Fixed.
  • "To date, over twenty million Kirby games have sold worldwide."-->Over twenty million Kirby games have been sold worldwide.
  • Fixed.
  • The game consoles are overlinked.
  • Removed all the wikilinks for consoles save their first appearance in the list.

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:06, 5 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose from me too; lead is too short. But shouldn't take too long to expand (make sure the prose is in tip-top shape!) Gary King (talk) 00:16, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Better. I'll strike my oppose. Gary King (talk) 22:08, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Better from me also, hopefully I will be able to provide a full review today or tomorrow. Striking oppose. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:58, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Alright, thanks. As soon as you add a review I'll get to work on fixing up the article; much obliged. -- Nomader (Talk) 23:14, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I left a comment on Gary King's talk page ([2], currently located here) on December 8. -- Nomader (Talk) 01:58, 13 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from SRX

Comments - the table itself checks out well, however, the prose in the lead needs work and expansion, I strongly recommend using List of Harvest Moon titles and List of WWE SmackDown video game titles as a template/guide in working on the lead.--SRX 23:11, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

I added a little bit to the lead, changed the wording around a bit. Right now however, I'm basing the three paragraph format off of List of One Piece video games; if you feel that one paragraph would be better for the article, I'll work the prose together as such. -- Nomader (Talk) 02:36, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I went ahead and merged the lead into one paragraph and tried to word it a bit better. Is this more along the lines of what you were looking for? -- Nomader (Talk) 02:47, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
It looks better, however, it still needs work: why is the series so popular? there also needs to be a prose summarizing the entire list like in other FLs.--SRX 01:18, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
I worked the lead to include a mention from the creator of the series as to its success, and I added in a statement about the range of consoles that the series has been released on. It's not in the order of some of the other FLs, but I think it works better for organization; is this more along the lines of what you were aiming for? -- Nomader (Talk) 02:40, 8 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
One more thing, hwo about the most recent release in the series?--SRX 03:30, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
I added it in, but I felt that it didn't fit with other FL examples so I reverted it back; it didn't fit with the ones you mentioned (neither List of WWE SmackDown video game titles, List of Harvest Moon titles include the latest game released). I may work in a note that a Wii version is currently in development in the lead, however. If I do, it will be so noted on this page. -- Nomader (Talk) 03:50, 9 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I went ahead and added a note about a Kirby Wii game in development in the lead. -- Nomader (Talk) 03:54, 9 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - my comments were resolved to comply with WP:WIAFL.--SRX 21:33, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
Comments by Guyinblack25
  • The lead
    • Instead of linking "video game" and "series", I would just link "video game series" to avoid overlinking.
    • Maybe wikilink "levels" to Level (video games) to provide some info to laymans.
    • Some prose suggestions
      • Tweaking for grammar, redundancy, and punctuation:
        "The gGames in the series have all been developed by the Japanese based company, HAL Laboratory, a Nintendo second-party developer."
      • Expand and clarify:
        "A common gameplay element is Kirby's is ableability to copy enemy abilitiesskills, allowing..."
      • I would mention the TV series originated in Japan, as the lead implies it is a North American show. I know the word anime implies otherwise, but this may not be apparent to a layman.
      • "based off of" → "based on"
    • I would put ref 7 at the end of the sentence with ref 8.
  • Format and content
    • I would put the mid-sentence refs at the end with the other refs.
    • Since it's split between video games and other media, wouldn't it make more sense to have those be the two main sections and the other video game related sections be subsections of the first?
    • The section for "Sequels" seems out of place to me. What makes these two titles so different from the rest that requires a separate section?
    • What type of games are the "Other titles"? I would include the type in the notes sections.

The list looks really good and is well sourced. Once these issues are addressed, I'll be happy to support. (Guyinblack25 talk 20:36, 4 December 2008 (UTC))[reply]

  • I went ahead and moved all the mid-sentence refs to the end of their sentences. I added in all of your prose and wikilink suggestions for the lead, and I went ahead and re-formatted the sections so it was by genres instead of the ambiguous titles that were up there before. I removed the "sequels" and moved them into the main list as well; does this address most of your concerns? -- Nomader (Talk) 21:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Looks better. My only remaining issue is including some gameplay description in the "Other" games. Like mention in the notes sections that Kirby's Dream Course is a golf game, Kirby's Block Ball is a Breakout clone, Kirby Air Ride is a racing game, etc.
Also, should Kirby Baseball be in the "Other" section? (Guyinblack25 talk 22:18, 4 December 2008 (UTC))[reply]
I went ahead and added it to games where the genre wasn't in the title (i.e. Kirby's Pinball Land) and the ones which you named above. If I didn't add it, it was because I couldn't find any refs for it (i.e. BS Kirby no Omotya Bako Baseball). Also moved Kirby Baseball. -- Nomader (Talk) 22:42, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
After looking over the list again, a few more issues stood out me.
  • Kirby Super Star should mention it is a compilation of smaller games and minigames.
  • The remakes should say what made them different from a regular system port. If they feature improved graphics and new content, mention it.
  • Why does Kirby no Kirakira Kizzu have its own entry? If it was released at the same time as and is essentially a port of Kirby's Star Stacker, shouldn't it be listed under the "System release" of Star Stacker?
  • The IGN link for Kirby Baseball gives a description of it a bit down the page, so you could use this describe the gameplay.
The list has really shaped up. Keep up the good work. (Guyinblack25 talk 23:01, 4 December 2008 (UTC))[reply]
I added in all your comments except Kirby no Kirakira Kizzu; I can't find any reliable sources about the game itself... I can only seem to find separate pages that say it existed, so it's in the list. If you can find a source that says it's a re-make of Kirby's Star Stacker (as it most likely is), I'll merge it into the list. For the record, I'm looking for one right now; if I find a source I'll mark it on this page. -- Nomader (Talk) 23:30, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Found a source, merged the two games together. -- Nomader (Talk) 23:37, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for reviewing. -- Nomader (Talk) 00:08, 5 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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