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The list was promoted by Matthewedwards 08:17, 31 January 2009 [1].

In Flames discography

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I'm working on this list quite a time, and finally this discography is ready to receive your comments and suggestions. Thanks in advance! Cannibaloki 03:48, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Weak oppose Comment Cannibaloki, I have been impressed with your ability to bring discographies to quality standards. However, the fact that English is not your native language (please don't take offense) has a negative effect on the prose. I am not going to tell you to withdraw, but in the future, please consider getting a native speaker to copy-edit before FLC. A couple examples before I sign off:

  • "Following the same blueprint, Come Clarity (2006), topped the Finnish and Swedish charts, and reached the number 2 on the Billboard Top Independent Album" The second comma is not necessary, and neither is the article "the" before "number 2".
    • Done.
  • "The album was backed by the single "Come Clarity", that even released in a limited edition, reached the number 52 in their home country." Not a grammatical sentence.
    • Hmm...
  • "Their newest full-length" "full-length" what? Dabomb87 (talk) 03:59, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Their newest full-length album..."

I don't have time to do a full review, I have many other things to do. Ask User:Indopug to copy-edit the lead. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:47, 23 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Truco

Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)

  • The following year appeared their second EP, Black-Ash Inheritance, and the full-length album Whoracle. - comm after year and add the word "they" after that new comma
    • "The following year, they appeared their second EP...[?]"
      • Are you trying to say "They released their second EP the following year?"--TRUCO 16:52, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
        • "The following year, appeared their second EP..." Cannibaloki 17:28, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
          • Do you mean The following year, they appeared on their second EP?--TRUCO 18:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
            • "The following year, they issued their second EP, Black-Ash Inheritance, and the full-length album Whoracle."--Cannibaloki 21:01, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Clayman followed in the same vein the next year, reaching the top 20 on the same countries. - "in" not on"
    • Done.
  • The tour to promote it, was released as the live album, The Tokyo Showdown (2001), again charted on Sweden and Finland, this time reaching the top 40. - --> The tour to promote it was released as The Tokyo Showdown (2001) live album, which also charted in Sweden and Finland; the album reached the top 40.
    • Done.
  • In many of these sentences, you say "on Sweden and Finland" which sounds incorrect, if you want to word it like that, it should be "on the Swedish and Finnish charts"
  • Reroute to Remain (2002), peaked at number 5 on Sweden and Finland,[1][2] and number 10 on the Billboard Top Heatseekers chart. - no need for the first comma, take my word about the "on" and the countries comment above
    • Done
  • The album was backed by the single "Come Clarity", that even released in a limited edition, reached the number 52 in their home country. - do you mean ..which was released is a limited edition that reached number 52 in their home country?
    • Done.
      • I'm trying to explain, which same released in a limited edition, it reached number 52 in their home country. (or something like) Cannibaloki 16:44, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Tables/listed content/sources check out fine.--TRUCO 15:20, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - problems fixed to meet the Featured list criteria.--TRUCO 23:20, 20 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • Resolved comments from Drewcifer

    Comments Looks pretty solid. Only a few minor complaints:

    • Some of the chart positions say just "Peak". I would say that "Peak chart positions" is still preferable, even though the text is too big for the space allotted. A good compromise might be to make the font slightly smaller. As it is, "Peak" is too vague.
      • Reduced size to 90% (using "Peak chart positions")
    • Some of the wikilinking in the citations is a little scattered. For instance MTV and MTV networks is wikilinked in the last two citations, but not the two before that. In general, try and wikilink it only in the first instance, or across the board, whichever you prefer.
      • Done. ("...wikilink it only in the first instance...")
    • I would also recommend making the catalog numbers small font, so as to not confuse them with the label names.
      • Done.
    • The year columns should be center-aligned.
      • Done.
    • The Nuclear Blast link seems like spam to me.
      • Removed.

    And that's it. Take care of the above and I'd be happy to support. Drewcifer (talk) 20:05, 28 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

    Thanks for take a look. Cannibaloki 20:33, 28 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

    Support I copyedited the lead a little bit, so now I'm happy to support. Great work! Drewcifer (talk) 23:00, 29 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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