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Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)
- Lead
- The WHL champion earns a berth into the Memorial Cup tournament, Canada's Major-Junior championship. -- Major-Junior should be pipedlinked to Junior ice hockey#Major-Junior
- History
- In 1971, four years after the league's founding, the CAHA reorganized the top level of junior hockey into two tiers, sanctioning the WHL as the top league in western Canada and one of three leagues, along with the Ontario Hockey Association (OHA) and Quebec Major Junior Hockey League (QMJHL), to form the "Major-Junior" tier. -- (1)IMO there is no need to state that it is 4 years after the league's founding (2) This would be better worded as 'In 1971, four years after the league's founding, the CAHA reorganized the top level of junior hockey into two tiers: the WHL was sanctioned as the top league in western Canada and as one of three leagues that formed the "Major-Junior" tier, the others being the Ontario Hockey Association (OHA) and Quebec Major Junior Hockey League (QMJHL).'
- The 1971 champion Edmonton Oil Kings thus faced the Quebec Remparts in the 1972 Memorial Cup final, though it nearly failed to materialize as the OHA and QMJHL initially refused to face the western champion. -- Comma after though
- The Oil Kings ultimately did play Quebec in an abbreviated championship, losing the best-of-3 series in two games. -- (1) No need to word it as such since in the previous sentence its confirmed that they did play. Reword possibly to 'The Oil Kings defeated Quebec in an abbreviated championship, losing the best-of-3 series in two games.' (2)It should be explained as to what the best of 3 series means or how that process functions.
- A half-dozen years later, the 1981–82 Winter Hawks recorded numerous other firsts, becoming the first American team to win the President's Cup,[3] as well as the first American team to compete for the Memorial Cup. -- A half-dozen is very wordy, how about 'Six years later'?
- "You've got to perform." -- this just seems like a random quote, remove or integrate it better in the text.
- The Blazers dominated the WHL in the early 1990s, capturing four league championships between 1990 and 1995 and three Memorial Cups to cap a seven championships in nine year stretch for the WHL between 1987 and 1995. -- ..to cap a seven championships in nine year stretch --> "...to cap seven championships in a nine year stretch"
- Chynoweth had served as president of both the WHL from 1972 and the CHL from 1975 until leaving both posts in 1995 to form the Edmonton Ice. He remained with the franchise through its transfer to Kootenay until his death in 2008. -- This would be better worded as 'Chynoweth had served as president of both the WHL and CHL from 1972 and from 1975, respectively, until leaving both posts in 1995 to form the Edmonton Ice.'
- List of winners
- Bold denotes won Memorial Cup; number in parenthesis denotes total championships won to that point -- This would be better represented as a key in table form located at the top of the table.
- See also
- Some of the links located here were already mentioned in the text so they should be removed from this section, like the President's cup.
- Notes
- Brandon qualified for the 1995 Memorial Cup the losing finalist as Kamloops was both the host team and won the WHL title. -- The grammar structure of this sentence is unclear, it needs to be revised
- Portland qualified for the 1986 Memorial Cup as the host team after New Westminster withdrew as host -- From my view point, 'the' should be added before the last host--TRUCO 02:02, 27 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Some excellent suggestions. I've changed all per your comments except for two: (1) I don't see a huge need for a tabled key to denote the use of bold text and the bracketed numbers, but I did move it to the top of the list. (2) There are no redundant links in the See also section that I could find. Somewhat confusingly, both the QMHJL and WHL used to call their championship trophy the President's Cup. The see also link refers to the QMJHL's trophy. I did remove the CHL awards link, however, as that is contained in the template. Thank you for the excellent review.Resolute
- The only thing I suggest is that you add "team" before won Memorial Cup in the note.--TRUCO 00:10, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Interesting idea. done. I also removed the bolding as it becomes redundant to the notes. Resolute 16:40, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah it does since you mention it in the results column. Now, however, you should re-add the bullet point.--TRUCO 17:30, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Picky, picky. ;) done. Resolute 17:39, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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