Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/William Burges/archive1
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The article was promoted by GrahamColm 05:39, 21 June 2012 [1].
William Burges (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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- Nominator(s): KJP1 (talk) 22:33, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I am nominating this for featured article because I think it provides a comprehensive overview of the life and work of William Burges, an important Victorian architect. I am grateful to all those who contributed to the article, in particular User:Tim riley for his absolutely excellent Good Article review and User:Dr Blofeld for first suggesting that it might be possible. I look forward to improving the article further by addressing the comments made at FAR. KJP1 (talk) 22:33, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Support as co-writer. Article is comprehensive and provides an excellent insight into his works and legacy.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:43, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Support; I like this article lots. It has all the needed content in it, provides great insight and it's comprehsneive. --Thine Antique Pen (talk • contributions) 19:14, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: I have only looked in any detail at the lead. A quick glance at the rest suggests a very comprehensive study of Burges and impressive use of the available sources. I doubt I will have time to venture much further, but here are a few points for consideration:-
- Re infobox
I personally dislike infoboxes, but when they are used they should be briefly informative about the main aspects of the subject. This one doesn't even include the information that Burges was an architect.
- Agree completely, infobox added no value either. Removed. If there is no further objection..♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:29, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Loud cheering! A most excellent decision. Tim riley (talk) 11:14, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- The removal of info boxes is good. Very happy with that! -- Cassianto (talk) 12:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Loud cheering! A most excellent decision. Tim riley (talk) 11:14, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Agree completely, infobox added no value either. Removed. If there is no further objection..♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:29, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Mmm an TFD for infobox person...♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:50, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Re lead
Citations: I don't think it is necessary to cite in the lead the statements that Burges was considered one of the greatest of the Victorian art-architects and that his career was illustrious. These points will surely be made, and should be cited, in the article. More seriously, the last lead paragraph includes: Burges's position as "a wide-ranging scholar, an intrepid traveller, a coruscating lecturer, a brilliant decorative designer and an architect of genius"[4] is again appreciated. This exact wording, and citation, is repeated in the Legacy section. You should replace the wording in the lead with a brief paraphrase.
- Removed all citations.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:44, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed quote, as repeated later, and re-worded. KJP1 (talk) 11:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed all citations.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:44, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
You should avoid long lists in the lead, e.g. the nine or ten buildings given in the second paragraph. Such lists are tedious to read - give two or three examples at most.
- I've trimmed the number listed but I would have to say given that a substantial amount of the article discusses his works that it is reasonable to highlight a few of them in the lead to effectively summarize the article. His most notable by far were Cardiff Castle and Castel Coch but I think it would be wrong not to mention a few of his others.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:46, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Many of his designs were never executed or were subsequently eradicated." It's an odd choice of word, "eradicated" (dictionary: "to obliterate, stamp out, to pull or tear up by the roots"). And it's not clear who did the eradicating.
- Changed to demolished. Hope this clears it up.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:44, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"For most of the century following his death, Victorian architecture was universally despised..." Surely, that's an overstatement? It may not have been fashionable during parts of the 20th century, but universally despised?
- Agreed, reworded and toned down. Although it is appears to be true that the majority who would have been likely to be passionate about architecture hated Victorian architecture, especially in the first half of the 20th century, I suppose much like many of us look back on the 80s and its Fashion faux pas!♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:55, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Other point
According to MOS:HEAD, section headings "should not refer redundantly to the subject of the article, or to higher-level headings". Thus the forms "Burges and Bute" and "Study of Burges" are in breach of MOS. The earlier could be "Work with Bute" or some such, the latter "Scholarly studies", perhaps.
- Have re-worded the above, and others, but am not sure I've made them any less redundant. Nor really sure I understand the MOS point here. The sub-headings summarise the content of the section and I can't really see how to do that without summarising the content. Would appreciate advice. KJP1 (talk) 11:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Really grateful for your very helpful suggestions and will be pleased to further revise the sub-headings if I can better understand what is wanted. KJP1 (talk) 11:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, having read MOS, which I should have done earlier, I see the point being made. It is the mentioning of the subject of the article, i.e. Burges, which is redundant. Shall now go and change. KJP1 (talk) 10:54, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done, now. KJP1 (talk) 11:01, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, having read MOS, which I should have done earlier, I see the point being made. It is the mentioning of the subject of the article, i.e. Burges, which is redundant. Shall now go and change. KJP1 (talk) 10:54, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Really grateful for your very helpful suggestions and will be pleased to further revise the sub-headings if I can better understand what is wanted. KJP1 (talk) 11:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Have re-worded the above, and others, but am not sure I've made them any less redundant. Nor really sure I understand the MOS point here. The sub-headings summarise the content of the section and I can't really see how to do that without summarising the content. Would appreciate advice. KJP1 (talk) 11:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I hope these points are helpful. Brianboulton (talk) 20:57, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for your comments. Yes, this nomination was put back several weeks primarily because I wanted to google book research each of his works and ensure it was as widely read and researched as possible. I wouldn't have felt comfortable with it being at FAC otherwise. Thankfully the most prolific article writer KJP did a wonderful job so only gaps need to be filled in.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:21, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Cassianto: This article is an extremely well researched and comprehensive account of its subject. It is a credit to both the nominator KJP1 and Dr.Blofeld. However, I do have some comments:
"Among the greatest of the Victorian art-architects..." - I have no doubt he was, although this does sound as if it's a bit of a puffery sentence.
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- Mmm the thing is he was and this is backed by countless sources. To not mention his status as a Victorian architect I think would be censoring.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Could we not say "Among the countries better known art architects" like this in the lead and then say "greatest" in the body with an inline citation?
- I have had a think and I don't have a big problem with this. I'm certainly not insistent on it and it won't sway my inevitable support. -- Cassianto (talk) 12:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Could we not say "Among the countries better known art architects" like this in the lead and then say "greatest" in the body with an inline citation?
- Mmm the thing is he was and this is backed by countless sources. To not mention his status as a Victorian architect I think would be censoring.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Neo-Classical architecture" or "Neoclassical architecture" as the linked article suggests.
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- Changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I think his death is mentioned too early on. I think the lede would be better in chronological order, with the death being mentioned at the end.
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- In principle yes but its in the right context as it says about his career being short but illustrious and it makes sense to write it there.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- That makes sense. -- Cassianto (talk) 12:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- In principle yes but its in the right context as it says about his career being short but illustrious and it makes sense to write it there.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
* There are date ranges for the list of building's. What are these? Are they how long the building took to build, to design, or both?-
- Construction I think. Thanks for your comments. KJP will affirm that.
- They are indeed dates of construction. We could remove them but I think they're helpful. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I think personally that they are not necessary as you go onto talk about them later in the article and the dates are listed there. They are also wiki-linked so those wishing to find out the dates can go there. The lede is only an overview of the article itself and as such should only touch upon all the area's of that subjects life; which it does do perfectly but im finding the date ranges are crowding the text. As a bartering tool, you could talk about the first building and explain a little about when it was built and for how long and then do as you have done and keep the other dates in brackets. This will then tell the reader what the other dates mean. However, if it was upto me the dates would go.-- Cassianto (talk) 12:35, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- I hope the use of your suggestion meets your concern. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I think it looks a lot better. -- Cassianto (talk) 23:04, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I hope the use of your suggestion meets your concern. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- They are indeed dates of construction. We could remove them but I think they're helpful. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Construction I think. Thanks for your comments. KJP will affirm that.
Early life and travels
"Special Architect" - why is this quoted? If it is a quote, source?
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- Changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:04, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Early works
"His early architectural career produced little although he won prestigious commissions for Lille Cathedral" - It feels like there is a word missing after "little". Little what? Little work? Little praise?
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- Changed to "His early architectural career produced nothing of major note"♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:07, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
St Fin Barre's Cathedral, Cork
"on gloomy days .. takes on a luminous quality, (and) in sunshine sparkles like salt" - "and" would be better in square brackets as per WP:MOSQUOTE.
Cassianto (talk) 10:06, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Well spotted. Fixed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:07, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Skilbeck's Warehouse
again here "...much of the drysalter's materials are brought, and over a circular window in the gable (a) ship bringing in its precious freight."
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- Done.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Christ the Consoler, St Mary's and St Paul's
Overlink to "Early English"."full-blown scheme of early Renaissance decoration" - Renaissance has been linked which really shouldn't be within a quote.
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- Done.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Trinity College Hertford
"thoroughly frightened the (College) Trustees." - square brackets needed.
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- Done.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:45, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The Tower House
"Of red brick, and in an "L" plan, the exterior is plain" - who said "L"?
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- Removed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:05, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"it is (Burges's) answer to the dilemma of style." - guess what!
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- Done.♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:05, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Is it metal-work or metalwork?
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- Without I think.♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:05, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I agree. -- Cassianto (talk) 02:40, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Without I think.♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:05, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Metalwork and jewellery
Link to Pugin in opening quote needs to go.
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"This item, carved in ivory and depicting St George slaying the dragon, was made for the first Bishop of Dunedin, New Zealand." - missing "in" before New Zealand.
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"He also undertook the creation of works as gifts for or commissions from patrons such as the Sneyd dessert service or the Bute claret jug." -- This doesn't read well. Is there a word missing from "...creation of works as gifts for or commissions from.. ."?
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- Re-worded. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Keep caps consistent. It's "Gothic" sometimes and "gothic" at other times.
whilst on the same text, "G" is quoted again. Why?
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- Changed. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Furniture
Overlink to Edward Burne-Jones
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The re-developed Gallery & Museum will re-open in Spring 2013." -- This will obviously become out of date and will require changing. I would delete.
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life
"Eccentric, unpredictable, over-indulgent and flamboyant," opens this section. It would look and read better if it had "Burges was known to be eccentric, unpredictable, over-indulgent and flamboyant"
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- Changed - hopefully for the better? KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- agreed. -- Cassianto (talk) 23:04, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed - hopefully for the better? KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Short, fat, and so near-sighted that he once mistook a peacock for a man, he never married." -- The marriage bit at the end looks poorly placed.
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- Moved to the end of the section, following the style of Daily Telegraph obituaries. But I warn you, the Dr and I have argued over this placement before! KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not surprised. The sentence is suggesting that it was as a result of his appearance, that he never married. This may not be true. He may have chosen not to marry, never met the right person, been a confirmed bachelor, a whole number of things. The sentence is misleading.-- Cassianto (talk) 12:23, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Not a fan of short sentences, that was why.♦Dr. Blofeld 12:26, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]I see. But it still looks strange seeing it tacked on at the end of a completely unrelated sentence. I'm pretty sure it can be added somewhere else, which won't make it look so out of place. We may have to ask about on this one if it's not resolved. I have replaced this on the article and have added, what I think, could make the line a little longer. Revert if your not kean.-- Cassianto (talk) 12:49, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Again, I hope the compromise meets your concerns and the Doctor's. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- It certainly meets mine. -- Cassianto (talk) 23:04, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Again, I hope the compromise meets your concerns and the Doctor's. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Moved to the end of the section, following the style of Daily Telegraph obituaries. But I warn you, the Dr and I have argued over this placement before! KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Another overlink for Burne-Jones
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"His vocation is Art... (a) matter of Uncommon Sense..." -- wrong brackets.
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- Changed - hopefully to the right ones? KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
link to "Freemason" may be possible?
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
does "first tasted opium" need to be quoted?
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- Removed. KJP1 (talk) 11:51, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Death
overlink to The Tower House.
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- Removed. KJP1 (talk) 11:54, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
another link to Burne-Jones.
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- Removed. KJP1 (talk) 11:54, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
-- Cassianto (talk) 02:40, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Legacy
"At Burges's death in 1881, his contemporary, the architect Edward William Godwin, said of Burges that" - I think this needs jiggling about a bit. I would say something like "When Burges died in 1881 it prompted his contemporary, Edward William Godwin to say..."
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- Oops. Edit conflict. So - from memory. Tweaked slightly. I was trying to emphasise the decline of his reputation, from near-reverence at his death, to loathing shortly thereafter. Does it work now? KJP1 (talk) 12:43, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- That's fine! -- Cassianto (talk) 20:55, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"From the 1890s to the later twentieth century Victorian art was under constant assault..." - is there a comma missing somewhere?
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- Done. KJP1 (talk) 12:43, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The following quote is not introduced and gives no explanation at the end as to who said it - "He founded no school,..had few adherents outside the circle of his practice..and trained no further generation of designers."
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- Done - by attribution to Aldrich. KJP1 (talk) 12:43, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"own strange genius turn(ing) the Middle Ages into magic." - it's our old friend again!
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- Done. KJP1
Study of Burges
"The current (2012) curator of Cardiff Castle, Matthew Williams",...- again this will become out of date if he leaves. I would say something like "The 2012 curator of Cardiff Castle, Matthew Williams" it's 'current' which should be omitted here.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 12:50, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
That's it from me. I really like this article, but I do think there are possibly too many quotes. Having said that, I'm not listing this as a comment and it will not sway my opinion. I think it's good that Tim has highlighted this below and I hope some can be trimmed back. This is certainly well on it's to becoming a FA, something which Burges and it's main editors deserve. -- Cassianto (talk) 10:16, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Really appreciate your comments and delighted that you like the article. It's much improved for your involvement. Re. the in-line quotes, as I add up the current consensus, it's you, Dr. Blofeld and Tim riley for cutting them back or attributing them, and me for retaining them. So I reckon I'll be editing soon! KJP1 (talk) 12:50, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- And now edited and attributed in line with your comments and those of the Dr and Tim Riley. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Support -- Cassianto (talk) 13:00, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Really appreciate your comments and delighted that you like the article. It's much improved for your involvement. Re. the in-line quotes, as I add up the current consensus, it's you, Dr. Blofeld and Tim riley for cutting them back or attributing them, and me for retaining them. So I reckon I'll be editing soon! KJP1 (talk) 12:50, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments
As mentioned at the top of the page, I reviewed the article at GAC stage. I made a few suggestions at the time about further improvements that would be needed if the article were to qualify for promotion to FA. Some have been addressed, but one that hasn't and strikes me as important concerns quotations: there are dozens throughout the article that in my view ought to be attributed in the text. For a few quotations there are inline attributions, such as "Pevsner describes St Mary's as 'a dream of Early English glory' and Crook writes, 'although Cork Cathedral may stand as Burges's greatest Gothic work, Studley Royal is his "ecclesiastical" masterpiece.'" This is, in my view, just right, but is lacking with other quotations in the article, such as:
- "a wide-ranging scholar, an intrepid traveller, a coruscating lecturer, a brilliant decorative designer and an architect of genius"
- "once established, after twenty years' preparation, his 'design language' had merely to be applied, and he applied and re-applied the same vocabulary with increasing subtlety and gusto."
- "not so much muscular (gothic) as muscle-bound."
- "a re-creation of a thirteenth century dream world…"
- "on gloomy days .. takes on…"
- "redeem the evils of industrialism by re-living the art of the Middle Ages"
- "fervent Celt, an enthusiastic builder, and an inveterate antiquarian"
- "Bute's most memorable overall achievement."
- "a prime example of the partnership of aristocratic patron and talented architect produc(ing) the marvels of Cardiff Castle and Castell Coch"
- "amongst the most magnificent the Gothic Revival ever achieved."
- "most successful of all the fantasy castles of the nineteenth century."
- "a superb example of Burges's genius in the construction of roofs."
- "was required to cover areas rather greater than his talents deserved."
- "rarely been equalled."
- "he executed few buildings as his rich fantastic gothic required equally rich patrons (..) his finished works are outstanding monuments to nineteenth century gothic," "the most magnificent that the gothic revival ever achieved,"
- "three dimensional passports to fairy kingdoms and realms of gold. In Cardiff Castle we enter a land of dreams."
- "that has become the skyline of the capital of Wales. The dream of one great patron and one great architect has almost become the symbol of a whole nation."
There are many more later, but I'll refrain from listing them. It may be that the absence of inline attribution won't bother other reviewers as it bothers me, and if there is a consensus that I'm making too much of this I'll pipe down.
Occasionally you put in quotation marks a phrase that, to my mind, doesn't gain by being a direct quotation. For instance, "the only private town house to be included." I don't think anyone could accuse you of plagiarism if you used the phrase without the quotation marks.
- Agreed, and I think we could possibly cut back on some of the quotes and simply remove them. I said that from the beginning.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:05, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- OK. Have gone through the article inserting inline attributions, removing redundant quotation marks and even - oh, the pain! - deleting some quotations altogether. I very much hope it addresses the concerns Tim, and everyone else but me, had. But I now need to re-read the whole thing as I fear I will have made the prose clunky. Also, although I've tried to "introduce" those I quote on first doing so, I'm not sure I've succeeded throughout. So, have I addressed this point satisfactorily or is there more I need do? KJP1 (talk) 16:58, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Re-reading, I find I haven't got all the books quoted, and I can't seem to find them all in the References Section. I'll list them as I go and would much appreciate assistance.The final sentence of the first para. of Early Works has a quote relating to the Cerberus Privy at Gayhurst. The footnote says Cooper but I'm not sure who?KJP1 (talk) 17:12, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Am I right in thinking you've now addressed the need to cite Cooper's text in the references? I've added an attribution to him in the text.KJP1 (talk) 10:14, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Done, now. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
That point apart, here are some miscellaneous comments and suggestions:
- Lead
"mediaeval" or (as elsewhere in your text) "medieval"? (I vote for the former, but consistency is the real point.)
- Agreed, changed all to mediaeval. ♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:46, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Name of the thoroughfare: "The Strand" or (as later in the text) "the Strand"? (I vote for the latter, but ... as above)
- Early life and travels
Hideous rash of overlinking in the third para: France, Belgium, Holland, Switzerland, Germany etc do not need blue links.
- Delinked.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:46, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Early works
"he did obtain a commission" – he obtained?"the Lefroy's tomb" – the Lefroys' tomb (i.e. the tomb of the Lefroys)?
- Changed both.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:56, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- St Fin Barre's Cathedral, Cork
"first major commission for St Fin Barre's Cathedral" – there's a slight ambiguity here which you can eliminate by putting a comma after "commission"
- Added.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:01, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Cardiff Castle
"re-building" – the OED doesn't allow the hyphen"fulfill his civic duties" – the OED doesn't admit "fulfill", but only "fulfil"
- Changed both.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:01, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Castell Coch
This is one of my bonnet's bees, and I don't press the point, but what has "whilst" got that "while" hasn't?
- An s and a t? Hehe, changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:22, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Blockquote – shouldn't be within quotation marks. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Block quotations
- I believe the quote beat a little around the Mulberry bush and have removed it and reworded slightly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:22, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"It does contain" – it contains?
- Fixed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:22, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"A superb fireplace" – does the source at ref 102 justify the adjective?
- Changed to stone fireplace and changed ref to one I've verified in Rowan's Art in Wales: An Illustrated History, 1850-1980♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:36, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Knightshayes Court
"the building was still incomplete, due to ongoing difficulties" – either "owing to" or "because of" in UK English (I believe "due to" without a verb is acceptable in American usage)
- Changed to "owing to"♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:36, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Park House
"Burges's signature Early French Gothic" – this is, I think, the fifth time we have had Burges's signature so-and-so, and the phrase is rather outstaying its welcome
- Removed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:36, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Christ the Consoler, St Mary's and St Paul's
We have a confusion of marquesses. "George Robinson, 1st Marquess of Ripon, although not as rich as Bute, was the Marquess's equal ... Both churches were built as memorial churches for the Marquess's brother-in-law" I suggest something like "George Robinson, 1st Marquess of Ripon, although not as rich as Bute, was his equal ... Both churches were built as memorial churches for Ripon's brother-in-law"
- Changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Personal life
"The Graphic of 1871" – italics wanted, I think
- Done.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"the Athenaeum" – a small point, but I wouldn't include the definite article in the piping
- Linked Athenaeum Club instead.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Sir John Heathcoat-Amory" – I'm not sure you need to blue-link him again here, but if you do, you should include the 'Sir' in the piping as you do earlier, in the Knightshayes Court section
- Removed link.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Death
"wrote, somewhat more prosaically" – some austere souls might regard this as editorialising, though in my view it's just on the right side of the line.
- Changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Legacy
"his jewellery and stained glass was lost" – were lost?
- Changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"it should be noted" – says who? See Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch#Editorializing
- Removed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"a relatively short career" – another of my minor pedantries: relative to what? I'd let the facts speak for themselves: "In a career of twenty years…"
- Removed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Study of Burges
"bequeathed to Crook following Handley-Read's suicide" – it is at least arguable that they were bequeathed before H-R's suicide. The OED: "To make a formal assignation of (property of which one is possessed) to any one, so as to pass to the recipient after one's death: To 'leave' by will."
- Changed to just "bequeathed to Crook without making judgement of timing.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:00, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
After that litany of carping and quibbling, let me add that I think this is a magnificent article, and will be FA material once the necessary adjustments are in place. – Tim riley (talk) 11:05, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your very constructive comments!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:46, 7 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I have struck all my ad hoc comments, but before adding my support I must in conscience wait to see what other reviewers think about the point I raised about attributing quotations within the text. I admit that the MoS says merely "the author of a quote of a full sentence or more should be named; this is done in the main text and not in a footnote", and there are few if any full sentences in quotes within the text. I rather hope other reviewers tell me I'm fussing about nothing, in which case it will be my privilege and pleasure to support this outstanding article.Tim riley (talk) 20:50, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Morning Tim. I was going to come and talk about the quotes on your page, but it's probably better done here. Firstly, I really appreciate all of the further comments and observations you've made - they, and Dr. Blofeld's responses, have again improved the article greatly. Re. the in-line quotes, I have to say that I don't think I share your concern, although I quite accept I'm rather less experienced in the FA arena! But I think they add substantially to the article and not just in length. They give the opinions of authoritative writers as to Burges's importance etc. They are, or should be, referenced in the notes so that any reader wishing to verify, or source them, can do so. I've blocked out today to go through the article again so will certainly check that they are. And I have sought to "fold" them into the text so that the prose flows and is interesting for the reader. The alternatives would seem to be: remove them - which I think would seriously diminish the quality of the article; or source them all within the text. This would, I think, become as repetitive as my use of "Burges's signature ...", in that it would be "Crook says", again, and again, or clumsy variants where I would try to use other words for "says". But I fully accept others, with more experience than I, may share your view. Shall we see? If the consensus is that they should all be sourced in the text - I can certainly do this, as I have all the books from which they come. Again, very many thanks for your time, your constructive engagement, and your very kind words. Best regards.KJP1 (talk) 10:06, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- See above. I hope the amendments address the concern. KJP1 (talk) 11:44, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Support - the above (together with its execution within the article) removes my one reservation about adding wholehearted support for this remarkably fine article. Tim riley (talk) 16:19, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
And thankyou for an equally fine review and constructive criticism which have helped improve it considerably.♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:25, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- First set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Lead
Is "art-architects" a genuine expression? I haven't come across it before.
- I think so. Certainly Crook, no mean scholar (!), uses it in his guide to the centenary Burges exhibition, "The Strange Genius of William Burges Art-Architect, 1827-1881". This [[2]] discusses the concept. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Mediaeval" Aargh! Please, please, revert to "medieval". "Mediaeval" is, IMNSHO, old-fashioned and pedantic. Have a look at WP's List of history journals - 7 journals have "medieval" in their title and none have "mediaeval".
- I have no strong feelings but perhaps we shouldn't be old-fashioned. Is the consensus to revert back? If so, I'll happily do so. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I think the ae like in Encyclopaedia is wonderfully pedantic and represents its origins very well. In my opinion it makes it more authentically "mediaeval"! But the universal spelling like that was suggested by Tim.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Dr B has kindly removed the "a" which caused you such pain! KJP1 (talk) 21:54, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "In short, my mediaevalism's affectation, born of a morbid love of admiration." Oh, all right! (I know Guillaume knows where this comes from, so bah to you, ha-ha to you, and that's what I shall say.) – Tim riley (talk) 17:27, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I can't resist having the last word. My 2nd edition of Fowler, published 44 years ago in the Swinging sixties, says on p.356: "medi(a)eval. The shorter spelling is recommended; see Æ, Œ ." --GuillaumeTell 10:53, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Rapid and inglorious retreat by Riley: I have all three editions of Fowler, and the old boy himself recommended the shorter spelling in the 1926 original. I shall examine my conscience about my own practice and will meanwhile keep my lip zipped when commenting on other people's prose. Tim riley (talk) 19:07, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I can't resist having the last word. My 2nd edition of Fowler, published 44 years ago in the Swinging sixties, says on p.356: "medi(a)eval. The shorter spelling is recommended; see Æ, Œ ." --GuillaumeTell 10:53, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "In short, my mediaevalism's affectation, born of a morbid love of admiration." Oh, all right! (I know Guillaume knows where this comes from, so bah to you, ha-ha to you, and that's what I shall say.) – Tim riley (talk) 17:27, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Dr B has kindly removed the "a" which caused you such pain! KJP1 (talk) 21:54, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I think the ae like in Encyclopaedia is wonderfully pedantic and represents its origins very well. In my opinion it makes it more authentically "mediaeval"! But the universal spelling like that was suggested by Tim.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:29, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"he designed churches, cathedrals..." Only one cathedral was actually built, so this is somewhat misleading
- Done. Point taken and re-worded. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
(Ahem!) "Worcester College, Oxford (1864-79)" rather implies that Burges worked on the college for the whole of that period. In fact, work on the chapel took place in 1864-5 (I think) and work on the hall started in 1877.
- Done. Point taken. Already removed in the lead, but I've changed the dates in the list of buildings to reflect those given by Crook in his appendix. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Early life
"entered King's College London in 1839 to study engineering" What, at the age of 12?!? Was there some sort of feeder school?
- Odd indeed but exactly what Crook says on page 39 of WB&THVD. But the next sentence reads "In those days King's College School (my italics) occupied the basement stories of [a] building next to Somerset House in the Strand." So I think you're right and the college had some sort of preparatory school. Have re-worded. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- And Wikipedia gives me the answer King's College School. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Odd indeed but exactly what Crook says on page 39 of WB&THVD. But the next sentence reads "In those days King's College School (my italics) occupied the basement stories of [a] building next to Somerset House in the Strand." So I think you're right and the college had some sort of preparatory school. Have re-worded. KJP1 (talk) 12:17, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Blore was an established architect, being architect to both William IV and Queen Victoria" Inelegant - suggest "Blore was an established architect who worked for both W IV and Queen Vic" or similar.
- Done, and re-done. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"medi[a]eval Court" - shouldn't this be either Medieval Court or medieval court (I suggest the former)?
- Done with a capital M. Left the extra "a" until we decide otherwise. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Now withoutthe extra a. KJP1 (talk) 11:44, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done with a capital M. Left the extra "a" until we decide otherwise. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Enabled by his private income" followed by list of miscellaneous countries. First, no dates for the eighteen months are given. Second, "Germany and Spain, Italy and Sicily" - why are Germany and Spain linked? Also, what is now Italy consisted then of a number of states of various sorts - I'd zap Sicily.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Your comments are very helpful and your continued interest in the article much appreciated. Look forward to more. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 13:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- More to come later today. --GuillaumeTell 10:41, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Second set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Early works
"Rooms there contain some of his large, signature, fireplaces, with carving by Burges's long-time collaborator Thomas Nicholls" - superfluous commas after large and signature; also Nicholls needs a wikilink here
- Done and Done. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The privy link takes us to garderobe, not very appropriate for a building that isn't a castle. Outhouse might be better, or Male Servants' Lavatory as in the Gayhurst House article, or .....??
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1859 Burges began work on the Maison Dieu in Dover with Ambrose Poynter, which was completed in 1861" - suggest "In 1859 Burges began work with Ambrose Poynter on the Maison Dieu, Dover, which was completed in 1861"
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Burges later designed the Council Chamber at the end of the hall" - what hall? How many halls have Council Chambers at their end? Is this something to do with the Maison Dieu having become the Town Hall?NB: the Maison Dieu, Dover article ought to be aligned with this one, e.g. it seems to say that Poynter was out of the picture by the time Burges started work, plus it doesn't refer to Connaught Hall or include wikilinks apart from one for Burges.
- Done. I shall head across to the main article later. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1859–60, Burges took over from Poynter in the restoration of Waltham Abbey" - suggest "took over the restoration of Waltham Abbey from Poynter"
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "
Charles Edward Lefroy, secretary to the Speaker of the House of Commons - suggest Speaker of the House of Commons
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 17:46, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
St Fin Barre's Cathedral, Cork
Early French redirects to French_Gothic_architecture#High_Gothic, but the article distinguishes Early Gothic from High Gothic, so shouldn't the link be to French_Gothic_architecture#Early_Gothic?
- I'm sure you're right but I don't know how to link to a sub-section within an article. Can anyone else help? KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I've fixed this - will give you a how-to-do-it tutorial on your Talk page later today. --GuillaumeTell 21:31, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm sure you're right but I don't know how to link to a sub-section within an article. Can anyone else help? KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"For the exterior, Burges re-used earlier plans" - maybe something like "re-used some of his ?earlier unexecuted plans"?
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"three-spired frontage" - to me, the frontage is at the West end, which only has two spires. Maybe "Three-spired exterior"?
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"cartoons" - maybe link to cartoons?
- Again, I could only link to the main page. Can anyone assist? KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I've also fixed this. --GuillaumeTell 21:31, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Much appreciated and the article much improved thereby. KJP1 (talk) 21:44, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I've also fixed this. --GuillaumeTell 21:31, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Again, I could only link to the main page. Can anyone assist? KJP1 (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Burges's architectural team
First sentence ends rather inelegantly with "perhaps was" - needs a bit of recasting?
- Done. Heavens, it was clumsy. KJP1 (talk) 18:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"It was Chapple who completed the restoration of Castell Coch after Burges's death and designed most of its furniture" - is that the right way round or did he design the furniture first?
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:09, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Yet more to come this evening and/or tomorrow - --GuillaumeTell 17:16, 9 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Excellent. Shall address them tomorrow.
Source review - spotchecks not done. Nikkimaria (talk) 01:31, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Haven't quite addressed them all yet, and we may have a few queries, but I did want to thank you very much for your excellent review of the sources. Everything you picked up has been exceptionally helpful and much improved the article's accuracy. You do have an absolutely deadly eye for detail. I hope you don't mind, but I've struck through those comments which I think we've addressed - I was developing a major headache trying to work out what still needed to be done. I think I've accurately struck those we've done and left those we have yet to do, but do, of course, revert if I've made an error.KJP1 (talk) 14:31, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]OK. I think we've addressed most of them but would appreciate clarification on the following:FN143 when you reviewed it, now FN147. You indicate a problem with page formatting but we can't see what it is.Now 151, uses hyphen instead of endash. 158 is also missing a period.Nikkimaria (talk) 21:49, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done and done. KJP1 (talk) 06:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN259 when you reviewed it, now FN266. You indicate a formatting problem but we can't see what it is.Now 271, you're using a comma format where other refs use periods, and are missing a retrieval date for the URL.Nikkimaria (talk) 21:49, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:55, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN179 when you reviewed it, now FN186. This is a sales catalogue from Vost's Auctioneers. It's not on the web, as far as I can see, it's not a Google book and it has no ISBN. Advice on what's wrong with the formatting would be appreciated.KJP1 (talk) 22:07, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]This seems to correspond to an entry on the References list, but is not linked, and the italicization doesn't match.Nikkimaria (talk) 21:49, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now worked out what the problem is and resolved. KJP1 (talk) 08:46, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Also, you ask "How are you ordering sources with the same author(s)?" Neither Dr. B nor I are sure what the issue is here. Could you clarify?KJP1 (talk) 22:09, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]When you have multiple sources by the same author (for example, Crook), you can order these in the References list either by date or by title. I wondered which you were doing, as it doesn't seem to be consistent.Nikkimaria (talk) 21:49, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- They are but Crook's books are both 1981 so we had to include the date and a/b to differentiate. Is this what you mean?♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:58, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Despite the protestations of fellow competitors, it won, though the final cost was to be in excess of £100,000." - source?
- Done. FN46. KJP1 (talk) 07:13, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Missing bibliographic info for Cooper
Done, I think. Dr. Blofeld, am I right in thinking you've already corrected this?KJP1 (talk) 10:14, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Looks OK to me?♦Dr. Blofeld 10:43, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Definitely done, now. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Pevsner and Wharton or Lloyd?
- Done, I think? I'd messed up and included Wharton's surname in the list of authors of the 1967 Hampshire and the Isle of Wight, which was only authored by Pevsner and Lloyd. Can you let me know if I haven't addressed the right problem. KJP1 (talk) 08:16, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN41, 209, 223, Karlin: doubled period
- Done, I think. I realise I've made this somewhat more difficult by adding some footnotes in respect of the three instances you identified below, where referenced works weren't actually cited in the text. As a consequence, the footnotes in the article as it now stands don't match the numbering as it was when you did your review. But I think I can work it out by going from an earlier version of the article. I shall know better next time. KJP1 (talk) 08:27, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN120: citation incomplete, missing italicization
- Done. Presuming that the incompleteness relates solely to the lack of italicization. KJP1 (talk) 08:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN127: formatting
NOT DONE. Dr. Blofeld, this relates to what is now FN129, Sherwood and Pevsner's Oxfordshire. But I don't know what's wrong with the formatting. Can you help.KJP1 (talk) 08:39, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now Done, I think I may have sorted this. When getting the references in alphabetic order, I found I'd put Pevsner first and Sherwood second as the authors, when it is, in fact, the other way round. So, assuming this is the issue referred to, it's sorted. KJP1 (talk) 09:37, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN141: page?
- Done. p=291. KJP1 (talk) 08:51, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN143: page formatting
NOT DONE. Dr. Blofeld, this relates to what is now FN145, Christopher Drew Armstrong's article. But I don't know what's wrong with the formatting. Can you help. KJP1 (talk) 09:06, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now Done. See above. KJP1 (talk) 06:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN148: pages?
- Done. p=504. But done correctly? It's now FN149. KJP1 (talk) 09:06, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN151, 153, 200, 202: what kind of sources are these?
First, due to my adding extra footnotes, these are now, FN153, 156, 205 and 207.FN153 is a source, Marks, within a source, Crook (1981a) I don't know how to quote a source within a source. What I will do is just quote the Crook page. Can somebody tell me if this is wrong.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Done. KJP1 (talk) 15:58, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN156 - same issue, and proposed resolution, as above.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Done. KJP1 (talk) 15:58, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN205 - This is from the Dictionary of Scottish Architects. Can't remember where I sourced it. Shall check and, hopefully, resolve.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Done'ish. Have added a link to the right web page but it's a bare URL and my Reflinks tool doesn't work any more. Can someone assist. Thanks.KJP1 (talk) 11:59, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Done now. Dr B has fixed the bare URL. KJP1 (talk) 17:21, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN207 - same issue, and proposed resolution, as FN153 and FN156.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Done. KJP1 (talk) 15:58, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN222: pages, formatting
- Done. It's now FN226. I've added the page numbers. Also corrected the text as I found a third mention of "Burgess". But have I formatted it correctly? KJP1 (talk) 09:50, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- FN259, 179,
191: formatting
- As above, these are now FN263, 184 and 196
FN263 - Don't know what's wrong with this as it seems to link perfectly to the Chicago Institute's website. Advice please. KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now done. KJP1 (talk) 06:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN184 - This is a sales catalogue from Vost's Auctioneers. It's not on the web, as far as I can see, it's not a Google book and it has no ISBN. Advice on what's wrong with the formatting would be appreciated.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now done - see above. KJP1 (talk) 08:46, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FN196 - I think this relates to a superfluous "&". Shall try to correct.KJP1 (talk) 11:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Sorry, can't. The FN reads "Crook & 1981a Explanation. I can't see where the "&" is coming from, however.KJP1 (talk) 11:53, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Dr B has somehow sorted it. KJP1 (talk) 16:13, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- As above, these are now FN263, 184 and 196
No citations to Burges 2009, Cherry & Pevsner 2002, Sargent 1977
- Done for Burges. Text and FN181. KJP1 (talk) 07:47, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done for Cherry and Pevsner (2002). Text and FN153. KJP1 (talk) 08:01, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done for Sargent. Text and FN169. KJP1 (talk) 07:47, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Buckingham: Don't need to say "The book does not have an ISBN Number." for books of that age, but does it have an OCLC?
- Removed. Looked in google books, no isbn or OCLC unless I'm mistaken?♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:40, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent in whether you provide locations for books
- Removed two mentions of location, should be OK now?♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:37, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
How are you ordering sources with the same author(s)?
NOT DONE. Dr. Blofeld, I'll need to pass on this as well. Can you help. Again, I'll do it, if you tell me what needs doing.KJP1 (talk) 09:06, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now done, we think. KJP1 (talk) 06:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Check alphabetization of sources
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 09:37, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieval dates aren't required for Google Books, but if you're going to include them you should be consistent.Nikkimaria (talk) 01:31, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done, I believe.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:37, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, I'll need some assistance on this, can't see anything wrong with citation 128 or 144, How are you ordering sources with the same author? etc. Can somebody help out with the sources here? ♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:31, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Now done, we think. KJP1 (talk) 06:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Third set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Partnership with the Marquess of Bute
"This may have resulted from his father's own connection with the 2nd Marquess, Alfred Burges's engineering firm, Walker, Burges and Cooper, having undertaken work on the East Bute Docks at Cardiff in 1855. The 3rd Marquess of Bute...": a bit convoluted - suggest "This may have resulted from Alfred Burges's engineering firm (Walker, Burges and Cooper) having worked for the 2nd Marquess on the East Bute Docks at Cardiff in 1855. The 3rd Marquess [no need for "of Bute" again], who was..." or similar.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:12, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"landed aristocrat, industrial magnate, antiquarian, scholar, philanthropist, High Tory, and Roman Catholic convert": some of this is repeated later in the para - "But, as a scholar, antiquarian, compulsive builder and enthusiastic medievalist ..." - suggest amalgamating these strings by adding "compulsive builder and enthusiastic medievalist" to the first and replacing the second with the sentence beginning "Bute brought more than money [etc.]"
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:12, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"re-building" should be "rebuilding"
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:12, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Cardiff Castle
"In the early nineteenth century, the original Norman castle had been enlarged and refashioned by Henry Holland for the 2nd Marquess, Bute's father." I don't think that this is accurate. As I understand it (from Newman's Glamorgan), all that was left of the Norman castle was the Keep, the (rebuilt) perimeter walls, the Black Tower and a few bits of wall that were later incorporated in the Western Apartments, built in the 15th and 16th century. Holland's work started around 1776 and the 2nd Marquess was born in 1793!
- Done. Heavens, you saved us from a major error there! I should have checked the pre-Burges period more thoroughly.
"Bute" is mentioned twice in the first para - it ought to be made clearer that this is the 3rd Marquess.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:19, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"a building which John Newman describes in The Buildings of Wales" - actually Glamorgan in the B of W series.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 18:19, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Forest of Dean ashlar" - no mention of ashlar in the F of D article. Newman (p.36) reveals that this is sandstone.
- Checked. I haven't changed this as I think we're ok. It is sandstone but Girouard says ashlar and Wikipedia describes ashlar as "prepared stone work (i.e., dressed, cut) of any type of stone" (my italics). That said, I could make it sandstone if you think it would be clearer but we do have the link. KJP1 (talk) 18:39, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"gildings" - shouldn't this be gilding?
- Done. It certainly should. KJP1 (talk) 18:39, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Marquess's name, John, in Greek" - Newman says "John, in Greek letters". It would be nice to reproduce the Greek letters here (I'm sure that WP does Greek letters).
NOT DONE - yet. That would indeed be very nice. I shall try it but both my Greek, and my dexterity with Wiki fonts are poor.KJP1 (talk) 18:39, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]I've now found a picture of Bute's bedroom in Williams's "The essential Cardiff Castle" (pp 26-7) and the name is in capitals, and looks like this: ΙΩΑИΣ (forwards, but also backwards as in a mirror). That's approximately IOANS, i.e. something like Johannes.--GuillaumeTell 21:23, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Excellent! KJP1 (talk) 21:45, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"extensive reconstructions on the outlines of the walls of the original Roman fort" - what does this mean? Reconstructions of what? Outlines?? Newman's p.209 mentions the reconstruction of the Roman walls and that's it.
- Done, I hope. You're right, a poor sentence which I've tried to make clearer. KJP1 (talk) 18:39, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"nine sculptures by Thomas Nicholls, with a further six being sculpted in the 1930s" - I don't think we need "being". And it might be worth mentioning that the six were by Alexander Carrick and that it was William Frame who continued Burges's work after his death.
- Done, done and done. KJP1 (talk) 18:39, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Onwards to Castell Coch, etc. --GuillaumeTell 18:10, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Fourth set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Castell Coch
I'm dubious about the abbreviation "Le Duc" for Viollet-le-Duc.
- Corrected. KJP1 (talk) 21:15, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Castell Coch was built on the site of a thirteenth-century castle"in the 2nd para more or less duplicates the description in the first para, except that one says fort and the other says castle. Suggest starting para with "Severely damaged..."
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:15, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Girouard states it is King David while McLees suggests it depicts St Lucius." Suggest inserting "that" after "states" and after "suggests".Is King David the David-and-Goliath (David) in the Bible or another King David? And which Saint Lucius is the correct one? (Newman votes for St Lucius over King David, btw.)
- Done and done. Although I'm not sure I can answer the questions. I would say King David is the biblical King David and is there really more than one St Lucius?. Actually, I know the St Lucius is the legendary King of Britain who introduced Christianity. But I can't remember where I read that and will check my books. KJP1 (talk) 21:15, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest that the Three Fates image move down a few lines so that it appears closer to the Three Fates text at the end of the para.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:15, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Next para - I think "murder holes" needs a link to murder-holes.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:15, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Worcester College, Oxford
Masonic redirects to Freemasonry in the same sentence - one blue-link is fine, two look like carelessness, as Lady Bracknell might have said.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"significant; Gillingham suggesting that..." - if using semi-colon, then "significant; Gillingham suggests that...", otherwise use comma instead of semi-colon ("significant, Gillingham suggesting that...")
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Still on the chapel, it might be worth mentioning that the stained glass and the ceiling paintings are by Henry Holiday and perhaps also that the statues, lectern and candlesticks are by William Grinsell Nicholl (1796-1871), who also made the reredos for Waltham Abbey (abbey) in 1862 (and carved decorations for the exteriors of the Fitzwilliam Museum in Cambridge, the Oxford and Cambridge Club in London, the Taylor Institution in Oxford and St George's Hall, Liverpool - maybe I could knock up a stub for him).Interestingly, the carved animals on the bench-ends are by a Mr Fisher, rather than Nicholls - so none of Burges's usual team seem to have been involved. I wonder why?
- Done.
But I think a couple of sources are therefore needed. Sherwood and Pevsner doesn't help. Help!KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Fixed - Chapel, not Hall(!), and extra S&P ref does provide the details. --GuillaumeTell 10:04, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.
Hall - not exactly a sequel, as it was done somewhat after the Chapel - dates needed.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"the East Window, above the high table, was resorted circa 2009" - resorted??? Maybe restored?
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Fifth set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Knightshayes Court
I've made a couple of minor alterations which I hope are uncontroversial. Also, in the blue Lonely Planet quote box, who is Mallory? Is this a brainstorm version of Heathcoat-Amery? And did he really have a boudoir (I associate them with ladies rather than gentlemen, but perhaps he was a transvestite)?
I don't know Mallory either. Can the Dr. assist? As to the boudoir, the NT guide, the only single volume I have on the house, describes it as "an essentially feminine retreat." So I think it unlikely it was Sir John's, but one never knows.KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]I think its a printing error. I've added a note in the ref as I believe the quote is informative and useful.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:02, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Now done, with Dr. B's note. KJP1 (talk) 06:39, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Park House
"This can be seen evidenced in many of Cardiff's inner suburbs, where traces of Burges's influence can be seen." Well, if Park House really was widely imitated, then "traces" can't be right - something stronger is needed. Also, "seen" twice in the same sentence doesn't look right. And I think this sentence needs a ref, e.g. Newman's para, p.219, starting "Further N" (or maybe move the ref from the previous sentence to this one).
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Christ the Consoler, St Mary's and St Paul's
Heading: Suggest "Christ the Consoler, St Mary's, and St Paul's Cathedral" instead of just St Paul's, otherwise it looks like three churches rather than the two mentioned immediately in the text (and St Paul's doesn't reappear until the last para).
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"the Church of Christ the Consoler and St Mary's, Studley Royal" - suggest "the Church of Christ the Consoler, Skelton-on-Ure and St Mary's, Studley Royal", otherwise the reference to Skelton at the end of the para might puzzle the readers. You could then perhaps knock off the Skelton-on-Ure after Newby Hall.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Important note: Pevsner & Radcliffe have been superseded by Leach, Peter (2009). Yorkshire West Riding: Leeds, Bradford and the North. New Haven and London: Yale University Press. ISBN 978-0-300-12665-5.{{cite book}}
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suggested) (help) and the Pevsner quote has disappeared. If you don't have access to this I can update the description. Same applies to St Mary, Studley Royal (where I see that there is an 1873 house by Burges in the grounds). There's also more detail on Oakwood Hall and probably other Burges works in the northern W Riding (15 references in the index).
- Noted with thanks. Dear Lord, you're determined to increase the size of this article even more! Fortunately, I do have Leach and Pevsner and have added it to the References, and also added a couple of comments from it re. Skelton and Studley Royal. I shall also add some extra details to the main articles, including the reference to the estate house at Studley Royal. But not here, I think, and not until this is done and dusted. Unless of course, your nudging me in the direction of those 15 index references throws up something that can't be ignored. In which case, it'll be a repeat of Worcester College and I'll need to add a whole new section. KJP1 (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Still more to come! --GuillaumeTell 17:18, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Your comments have improved the article greatly and are much appreciated. Even if it does sometimes seem like a second GAR! KJP1 (talk) 21:35, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Luckily for me, on checking the 15 Leach references, I don't find anything that really demands inclusion. Apart from Oakwood, Skelton and Studley Royal, they refer either to competitions for civic buildings that he didn't win or to his influence upon others. Except for some gate piers at Newby Hall, of which I wasn't aware. Whilst I don't think they need mentioning, they do need visiting. P.S. You shall certainly enjoy the Gillingham. And no, I didn't know she was the wife of the last Provost. Looking forward to the remaining comments. Best regards. KJP1 (talk) 04:53, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Your comments have improved the article greatly and are much appreciated. Even if it does sometimes seem like a second GAR! KJP1 (talk) 21:35, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Sixth and final (!) set of comments by User:GuillaumeTell
Metalwork and jewellery
The Elephant Inkstand appears twice in this section and also in the Tower House section - looks rather like overkill. The Cat Cup also figures in both sections.
- Done. In all three instances. Overkill indeed. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Furniture
"Burges's furniture is characterised by its historical style, its mythical iconography ..." - shouldn't that be mythological?
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Others were created as commissions, such as the Yatman Cabinet" - suggest "Others, such as the Yatman Cabinet, were created as commissions."
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No need for comma after Crocker Dressing Table
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
E.R.B. Graham > Col. E.R.B.Graham (http://www.culture.gov.uk/news/media_releases/7198.aspx). I see that the Zodiac Settle seems to have been sold by the Waugh family. (http://www.telegraph.co.uk/culture/art/artsales/8325206/Ai-Weiweis-sunflower-seeds-go-on-sale.html#)
- Indeed. Evelyn Waugh was given at least three pieces by Betjeman. Given current prices, Waugh's descendants should be very grateful. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life
"the medieval Society" - should be the Medieval Society?
- Done. Yes, it should. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Legacy and influence
Missing quotation marks at the end of the Goodwin quote
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"...Crook contends Burges's place at the centre of that world" - needs "that" after "contends"
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Architectural scholarship
"In the same year, the only full study of Burges was published, Crook's William Burges and the High Victorian Dream." - suggest "In the same year, the only full study of Burges, Crook's William Burges and the High Victorian Dream, was published."
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
List of works
right at the end, "Philosophy cabinet, 1878–79 – designed for the guest bedroom at Tower House" - OK, but where is it? If not known, then it needs "present location unknown" as in some other pieces above.
- Done. It's owned by Andrew Lloyd-Weber, and sits in Sydmonton Court amongst his rather splendid collection of Pre-Raphaelite pictures but I can't find a reliable source to confirm this. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
See also
I'm a but dubious about these:- Victorian architecture - no mention of Burges (nor any picture of any of his works) in this rather short article.
Gothic Revival architecture - one glancing reference to Burges in the context of West Norwood Cemetery!
- Removed. I agree they add little to the study of Burges and if one doesn't know, by the end of the article, that Burges was a Victorian architect working in the Gothic Revival tradition, one hasn't read it very carefully. I've also removed the only external link. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- That seems to be it!
- Support Long, but very informative and readable - a labour of love, in fact. --GuillaumeTell 17:57, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- It is a labour of quite long-standing love. But, for all my affection for Burges, I could never have made the article what it now is, without contributions such as your own. I appreciate it hugely. KJP1 (talk) 21:03, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Image/spot checks? Don't think I can see either of these above, we'll need people to perform them before we wrap up this review... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:06, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Images should all be fine.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:24, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- As the Dr. says, I think all the images will be fine. But I'm not really eligible to say this, so if someone else was able to do so, I shall try to respond as promptly as possible, in the event that any issues are raised. KJP1 (talk) 18:08, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Am I eligible to do a spot check? I reviewed the article at GAN, and have contributed extensively above, though my contribution to the article itself has been de minimis. If I qualify as a disinterested party I shall be happy to nip down to the British Library and spot-check a sample of the citations for accuracy and for innocence of excessively close paraphrase. – Tim riley (talk) 15:41, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Again, I don't think I can comment on your eligiblity, but if you are able to do so, I would appreciate it enormously. KJP1 (talk) 18:08, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Go for it. I think you can be more than trusted to ensure the spot check is done correctly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:18, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I have ordered Girouard, Crook and Lawrence at the British Library and will check against them tomorrow. Tim riley (talk) 19:21, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Excellent. I don't anticipate any difficulties but it is, of course, quite possible that I've made a mistake. I have them all here so should be able to respond very promptly to any queries. Best regards. KJP1 (talk) 19:56, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, Tim, I must confess that when I asked for the spotcheck, I had you in mind -- it hadn't escaped my notice that you'd already been involved in the review and I was hoping to see you do more... ;-) Seriously, your involvement in the article itself would be the key thing COI-wise, and as you say that's relatively minor -- so pls go for it, tks. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:07, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Image review from Crisco 1492
File:William Burges portrait.jpg - Needs the lifetime of the artist. (Henry Van der Weyde should have that.) Also needs a US PD tag.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Missed the US PD tag. Got it.
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:The Arab Room Ceiling, Cardiff Castle.jpg looks fine
- File:All Saints' Church, Fleet - geograph.org.uk - 1719303.jpg looks fine
- File:CorkCathedralsunlight.jpg looks fine.
File:Dover 11.JPG - should be renamed to a more descriptive filename. Have already requested it.
- Done. Thank you. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Cardiff Castle - Palast außen.jpg looks fine
File:Burges as Burges.jpg - Needs date of death and a US PD tag.
- Done and done, I think. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Meant the date of death of the author. Don't worry, I've added it. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done and done, I think. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:John Crichton-Stuart.jpg - If the creator is unknown, PD-70 cannot apply. This needs {{PD-UK-unknown}}. I think it may need a US PD tag, for which proof of publication would be necessary.
- Done-ish. Have added PD-unknown. Can we assume, as you're unsure, that it doesn't need US PD, and thus proof of publication, as I don't think we can provide this. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Please don't cross out my comments; I will cross them out if they have been addressed. I added PD-US just to be safe (work created before 1892, so certainly free in the US)
- Done-ish. Have added PD-unknown. Can we assume, as you're unsure, that it doesn't need US PD, and thus proof of publication, as I don't think we can provide this. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:Animal Wall Cardiff.jpg - Where was this first published? If outside the US, it needs a PD tag for the country of origin.
- Done. I've added PD OLD as it is inconceivable, ??, that it wasn't first published in the UK. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Please don't cross out my comments; I will cross them out if they have been addressed. First published in the US, so PD-1923 added. Fine now.
- Done. I've added PD OLD as it is inconceivable, ??, that it wasn't first published in the UK. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Cardiff Castle clock tower.jpg looks fine.
File:Design for the Summer Smoking Room at Cardiff Castle.jpg - Lifetime? US PD tag?
- Done the tag. Hope the lifetime's not critical. KJP1 (talk) 23:47, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Please don't cross out my comments; I will cross them out if they have been addressed. If you are to use PD-Old or the like, you need at least a death date for persons from the 19th century or later. A person aged 20 in 1872 may have died as late as 1945, or later.
- Done the tag. Hope the lifetime's not critical. KJP1 (talk) 23:47, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:Castell Coch frontside January midday.jpg - image is awfully dark.Also, should probably have an information box.
- It is, a bit, but I can't find an image that better shows the castle's frontage. Not sure what the required info. box should contain but will try. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC) If the information box is not absolutely essential, can I ask that someone with more understanding of these matters than I, add it. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Similar to File:Maison Dieu House, Dover.jpg is fine. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- It is, a bit, but I can't find an image that better shows the castle's frontage. Not sure what the required info. box should contain but will try. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC) If the information box is not absolutely essential, can I ask that someone with more understanding of these matters than I, add it. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Three Fates chimneypiece, drawing room of Castell Coch.jpg - Looks fine.
- File:Knightshayes Court - geograph.org.uk - 773493.jpg - Looks fine
- File:Park House Cardiff.jpg - Looks fine.
- File:Resurrection Angel St Fin Barre's Cathedral .jpg - needs categories. Also, this looks it was upsampled from a smaller image (can't find which), so I doubt that this is the author's own work.
- Have replaced as I cannot address the issues. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Please don't cross out my comments; I will cross them out if they have been addressed. What image did you replace it with?
- Have replaced as I cannot address the issues. KJP1 (talk) 22:00, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:St Marys Church, Studley Royal - geograph.org.uk - 7683.jpg - Looks fine.
File:Burgesplan.jpg - Is the original this brown? Needs a US PD tag
Afraid so. Added US PD tag. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]*PD-70 is not enough for the US, as many works are still protected. This falls under PD-100, which works.— Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- And now a much lighter image with the appropriate tag. KJP1 (talk) 15:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:The Tower House.jpg - This looks like it was scanned from a book, and there is no exif data here. Is this truly free? File:The Tower House 2008 07 07.JPG seems to be more clear.
A little faint maybe but I'm of the opinion its a better image that the one you suggest. It looks dull not to mention the cars being an eyesore... This is better and can be uploaded if desired? ♦Dr. Blofeld 13:30, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]- That would do wonderfully. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:59, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- All superseded by the above, but it is an original photo, which I took a long time ago.
- Okay, just confused by the grain on the image. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Quite understand why, if my memory serves, it's pre-digital and then scanned. KJP1 (talk) 15:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:BLW Decanter.jpg - Looks fine, although I'd prefer another free image of the decanter (the light under it is really distracting)
- I agree but don't think we can find a better one. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:St Mary's, Studley Royal.jpg - a little dark at the lion, but license-wise fine
- Agreed but, again, we shalln't find better, I think. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Painted bookcase 1 - Manchester City Art Gallery.jpg - Looks fine.
File:Burges as jester.jpg - Needs {{PD-UK-unknown}} and a US PD tag.
- Done, and done. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- To be safe, we shouldn't include PD-100 with persons from the 19th century. PD-US covers unpublished works. All that were taken before 1892 are free.
- Done, and done. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- File:William Burges Vault at West Norwood Cemetery.jpg - Looks fine
- File:Animal Wall 7 Cardiff.jpg - Looks fine
- File:Burges as architect.jpg - Needs a link to the source, showing proof of who made it and when. It will need a US PD tag as well.
- The latter done but shall need to think about the former. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Still needs a link. "Internet" is not a valid source statement. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- The latter done but shall need to think about the former. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Side note: Current FNs 36, 111, 119, 140, 149, and 163 are showing up as errors with Ucucha's script. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:18, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Still many formatting errors in the footnotes (missing years, commas, and the use of the wrong code for italics). — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Spot check of sources
- Crook 1981a
- 1 – fine
- 4 – The source doesn't actually say this, but the inference is entirely justified
- 6 – fine
*9 – I can't find this in in the source
- I see what you mean. I've re-worded as "Burges's work with Wyatt, particularly on the Medieval Court for this exhibition, was influential on the subsequent course of his career." I think this is supported by Crook's ""Wyatt's influence set Burges on a path which shaped much of his career." I'd be loathe to lose all reference to the Medieval Court as it was B's work with W on this that had a greater influence on him than any other aspect of his apprenticeship to Wyatt. KJP1 (talk) 17:36, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 11a and b – fine
12 – All the places are mentioned in Crook, but on pp. 44–48, not 53
- Corrected. I've put 45-50 but I agree you could say 44-48, the earlier covering his first French visit and the latter covering his arrival in Turkey, not his departure. KJP1 (talk) 17:52, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 14a and b – fine
15 – The source confirms the Japanese element but makes no mention on the cited page of Moorish influences or the Arab Room
- You're right. I've added both Near and Far, and changed the first reference to p.51. I was trying to say two things in one sentence. The new referencing is supported by Crook "the art of Islamic Cairo became a key ingredient" p.51, and his reference to the Japanese Court on p.52. KJP1 (talk) 17:52, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 26a, b, and c – fine
- 27 – fine
- 37 – fine
- 45a and b – fine
45c – I can't find this in the source
- Quite right. It's p.200. ""Cork would never be able to afford a really large cathedral." Changed. KJP1 (talk) 18:02, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
48a – ditto
- Corrected. 199, not 190. KJP1 (talk) 18:19, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 48b – fine
- 49 – fine
- 50 – fine
- 51 – fine
- 54 – fine
- 55 – fine
- 57 – fine
59 – There's no mention that I could find in the cited source of "best glass" or of St FB's Cathedral.
- Again, I see what you mean. P.188 gives his starting work with B and I've added 204 which gives details of Saunders working at St FB. KJP1 (talk) 18:27, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 61 – fine
- 62 – I can't find this in the cited source
Corrected. 305, ".. employed by Messrs. Burges and Walker on Cardiff's Bute East Dock."
63a – I can't find this in the cited source
- Corrected 259, "Bute's potential as a patron was vast: Burges released the spring." Apologies. No idea what happened to these two. KJP1 (talk) 18:51, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 63b – fine
- 69 – fine
- 75a and b – fine
- 85 – fine
- 90 – fine
- 100 – fine
- 105 – fine
- 110 – fine
- 113 – fine
- 121a and b – fine
121c – correct page is 239, not 238, and these aren't Crook's words but those of the obituarist in The Echo
- Corrected to p.239 and re-attributed. KJP1 (talk) 20:03, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 123 – fine
- 125 – fine (We won't fall out over the omitted 11 shilliings)
- 126 – fine
- 129 – fine
130 – I can't find this in the cited source
- Nor can I. Changed to Cherry and Pevsner "were toned down and altered." KJP1 (talk) 20:29, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 136 – fine
137 – I can't find this in the cited source
- Unfortunately, neither can I. Removed cite. KJP1 (talk) 20:29, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 138 – The source doesn't say this in so many words, but the interpretation here is justified, IMO.
- 142 – fine
- 153a–c – fine
- 154a and b – fine
- 156 – fine
- 157 – fine
- 158 – fine
- 161 – fine
- 165 – fine
- 179 – fine
- 185 – fine
- 192 – fine
- 201a and b – fine
- 202a and b – fine
- 204 – fine
- 210 – fine
- 211 – fine
- 212 – fine
- 213 – fine
- 214 – fine
- 215 – fine
- 216 – fine
- 217 – fine
- 218 – fine
- 221a and b – fine
- 222a and b – fine
- 226 – fine – fine
- 236 – fine
- 237 – fine
- 238 – fine
- 239 – fine
- 253 – fine
- 266 – fine
- 267 – fine
- 268 – fine
- 269 – fine
- 270 – fine
- 271 – fine
- 272 – fine
- 273 – fine
- 277 – fine
- 279 – fine
- 281 – fine
- 284 – fine
- 285 – fine
- Lawrence and Wilson
40a – I couldn't find in the text anything relating to the "Early French" reference or to the quote.
- Me neither. Removed. KJP1 (talk) 20:48, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 40b – fine
- 43a and b – fine
- 44 – fine
- 46 – fine
- 52a and b – fine
- 69a and b – fine
182 – fine except that Lawrence (like all right-thinking people) spells "mediaeval" thus
"All right thinking people", except Fowler, of course. KJP1 (talk) 20:48, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]Devoted as I am to Fowler, he had his off-moments, e.g. urging us to eschew "chiropodist" in favour of "corn-cutter".Tim riley (talk) 21:03, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 183 – fine
- 184 – fine
- 223 – fine
- Girouard
76a – fine, except for the ashlar, of which Girouard makes no mention
- Done by moving citation. KJP1 (talk) 20:58, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 76b – fine
- 78 – fine
80a – three words in brackets in the source are omitted in your quotation with no indication that you have edited it; three dots wanted here, I think
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 20:58, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 80b – fine
- 81 – fine
84a – Girouard is not as definite as you represent him as being: he says that the room "appears" to be B's last work, and Bute "probably" had the initials put there as a memorial
- Caveated, appropriately, I hope. KJP1 (talk) 20:58, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- 84b – fine
97 – This was the only bit of paraphrasing that struck me as in any way dubious. Your text reads, "Burges defended their use by reference to a body of doubtful historical evidence, but, in truth, he incorporated them for their architectural effect". The original reads, "Burges supported his roofs with a considerable body of examples of doubtful validity; the truth was that he wanted them for their architectural effect." I'd say that's much too similar for comfort.
- That's my fault. In removing the long quote that was there I reworded it slightly and didn't have the Crook source at my fingertips to be aware of that... I've changed it to a quote.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:21, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I checked the four JSTOR references, 152, 193, 227 and 241, which are all fine, as regards both accuracy and freedom from close paraphrase.
Where I have said, above, that I couldn't find something in the source I mean just that; Crook, in particular, is in fairly dense prose, and I shall be quite happy to be told that I have overlooked something I was seeking. – Tim riley (talk) 13:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I am satisfied with the responses above and consequent changes to the text. Tim riley (talk) 21:11, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Delegate note -- while we're on the subject of sources/citations, there are a few spots where I'd expect to see citations as a matter of course, mainly at the end of paragraphs:
Cardiff Castle -- 4th para
- Done. Crook a p.84. KJP1 (talk) 20:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Castle Coch -- 4th para
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 20:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
*Knightshayes Court -- 2nd para
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 20:44, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Christ the Consoler, St Mary's and St Paul's Cathedral -- 1st para
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The Tower House -- 1st para
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Furniture -- last para
- Done by removing text. KJP1 (talk) 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life -- "Contemporaries referred to Burges's child-like nature; Dante Gabriel Rossetti composed a limerick about him (see box)." (either this sentence or the quote box referred to should be cited).I ran across this in Girouaud (I think - or if not Lawrence) this morning, if that helps KJP1 track it down.Tim riley (talk) 21:07, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Architectural scholarship
- Done. KJP1 (talk) 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:40, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I HAVE TO SAY I COULD HAVE DONE WITHOUT WIKIPEDIA HAVING A SERVER PROBLEM ON THE VERY NIGHT I TRY TO FINISH THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KJP1 (talk) 20:44, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- This is really becoming very, very trying. 21:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
- A question about the References section
I'm not well up on the minutiae of this section, but I've noticed that only one author in the References list has an authorlink to his/her Wikipedia article - and that is the only one supplied by me (Falconer Madan)! I had a look at Wikipedia:Citing sources to see whether there's any guidance on this but there doesn't seem to be anything (or else I'm looking in the wrong place). Personally, I would link all authors who have WP articles when they first appear in the Refs section (e.g. Christopher Hibbert, Elizabeth Eastlake, maybe others) unless they're already linked in the text of the article (which a lot of them are, e.g. Pevsner, Crook, Betjeman - but it might be helpful if they were also linked in the Refs section as well). Anyway, I'd be happier if people who know more about this than I do could point to some guidance somewhere that sayeth yea or nay. --GuillaumeTell 09:52, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I see exactly what you mean and having a single linked author in the references certainly looks odd. I have no idea what the "right" answer is but I hope you will forgive my solution, with which I fear you won't be entirely happy. I've de-linked Madan. I've neither the heart, nor the energy nor the skill, nor even, this evening, the enthusiasm for the article, to try and link all the others and I fear I would just make a mess. If there is a MOS ruling which says they should all be linked, please could someone with more wiki editing skill than I undertake the task. KJP1 (talk) 21:18, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Don't link any of them, that's easiest...♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
OK. I think there is only one issue remaining from the above. This is:
- File:Burges as architect.jpg - Needs a link to the source, showing proof of who made it and when. It will need a US PD tag as well.
- The latter done but shall need to think about the former. KJP1 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- The picture is hugely valuable to the article and I should be loathe to lose it. Can somebody address Crisco 1492 (talk)'s concerns, to whom I repeat my thanks for a wonderfully thorough image review. Alternatively, I could delete it because the article can survive its loss.
- Subject to the resolution of the above, I believe all issues raised at FAC have been addressed. KJP1 (talk) 22:15, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
While (not whilst) being in the happy position of not having any FAC comments to address, I did want to record my enormous thanks to all of the editors who have improved this article; with no apology, I make specific mention of Cassianto for his unflagging interest and insightful comments, Crisco 1492 for his invaluable image review, User:GuillaumeTell for his second GAR, and for his humour and User:Tim riley for his orginal GAR which drove the article forward, for his source review and for his unfailing support. Lastly, User:Dr Blofeld - the first to see the article's potential, the first to see that I could be made to learn some rudiments of wikipedia editing, the first to provide encouragement when I most needed it, and this article's co-author. KJP1 (talk) 22:58, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Delegate's note - Please address Crisco's remaining comments on the reference formatting and the image source, this can be done post FAC. My thanks to the reviewers. Graham Colm (talk) 05:37, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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