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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 23:53, 27 February 2016 [1].

Tibesti Mountains edit

Nominator(s): Brycehughes (talk) 06:09, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the Tibesti Mountains in northern Chad. I translated almost all of the article from the French article several years ago. I have recently updated the history section of the article, and so I've brought it here for consideration, because it seems more of a fit under the FA criteria rather than the GA criteria. Please feel free to slap me down; in my years here, I have never done anything close to this before. Brycehughes (talk) 06:09, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The term ehi refers to peaks and rocky hills, emi to larger mountains, era to craters, and tarso to high plateaus or gently sloping mountains - err, which language are these in as you've listed three in the preceding sentence....
Tarso Tôh was an active volcano in the early Holocene - I think some numbers in years would be more helpful for the lay reader
Due to its isolation and geopolitical situation, the Tibesti Mountains were long unexplored by scientists - singular/plural...
Where mosquitoes do not abound, they support several villages, such as Zouar, where indigenous plant species have largely been replaced by some 56,000 date palms (Phoenix dactylifera) for the production of dates - ..sounds like the mosquitoes are supporting the villages..

@Brycehughes: overall looking okay prose- and comprehensivenesswise I think, but I am not too familiar with the place, and my reading is not good on picking up details at times. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:15, 17 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Cas Liber. I really appreciate it. I'm a little slammed with work at the moment but I will get to this as soon as I can. Brycehughes (talk) 03:23, 17 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Jens Lallensack

Cool, thanks for this important article, which certainly is not easy to write. Below my thinkings so far (I'm not done with reading), in the hope that some of them might inspire you to improve the article even further.

  • The article is very detailed, which is not necessarily bad, but I fear that sometimes the important general information is not coming across properly. As an example, see section topography, which starts with a long list of peaks. That's not fun to read, and not informative for a reader who has never heard of these names and want to get a general idea of the topic. A separate article (List of peaks in the Tibesti) might be better for this kind of information. Simultaneously, general information is scarce here: For example, how are the peaks distributed in the Tibesti? Are the highest peaks concentrated in a specific region, or do all parts of the massive come with peaks of similar height? Answering questions like these is imho more helpful for the reader.
  • I'm not sure of the list of animals either. Perhaps comparisons with other regions in northern Africa would be more helpful. What are the unique characteristics of the flora and fauna, in what way are they different to similar regions outside the Tibesti, and what role do they play for the biodiversity of Africa? Which species are endemic? In the flora section, you acknowledge that separate parts of the Tibesti are home to very different plants. But what about the animals? There we only have a list, but I assume they do not all appear together? I understand that my queries here might be difficult or impossible to solve.
  • The section "Topography" is not strictly about topography, but contains a lot of information that I would expect to find under "geology".
  • Then, I have found a few minor things: In the lead you write "Bikku Bitti, the highest peak in Libya, is located in the north of the range." Here, as a reader, I was interested in the elevation of that peak, as you gave this information for the highest peak in Chad which you are comparing.
  • "but according to the Smithsonian Institution" – to much detail?
  • "These volcanic complexes are now considered inactive, but according to the Smithsonian Institution were active during the Holocene." With "these volcanic complexes" you mean the lava domes or the shield volcanos? Had they really all been active during the holocene?
  • "Tarso Toussidé is an active volcano that has spewed lava over the past two millennia." - this is a bit contradictorily, as you previously stated the volcanoes are "inactive".
  • "similar to the Hawaiian–Emperor and Cook-Austral seamount chains." - should be "unlike the" instead of "similar to", if I'm not mistaken?
  • "This phenomenon is also seen in Martian volcanoes, particularly Elysium Mons." Which phenomenon? That the geographic alignment with age is present or absent? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:04, 22 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jens Lallensack: Thanks a ton for going through this. I will jump on it as soon as I can. Brycehughes (talk) 01:02, 23 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment -- Sorry but this review has been open almost six weeks with no clear support for promotion, so I'll be archiving it shortly. Pls feel free to re-nominate after actioning outstanding comments (and a minimum two weeks has passed, per FAC instructions). Tks/cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:44, 27 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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