Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Les Holden/archive1
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The article was promoted by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 16:57, 6 March 2015 (UTC) [1].[reply]
Les Holden edit
Following on from Elwyn Roy King, Roy Phillipps and Garnet Malley, I present another Australian fighter ace of World War I to help commemorate the centenary of that conflict. Okay, you've probably never heard of Les except by association (his uncle co-founded car manufacturer Holden), but he certainly led an interesting life. King and Phillipps may have been the more successful aces, but Holden had the most eventful post-war career in civil aviation. Like them, he died too early, in this case on a routine passenger flight after having survived numerous brushes with death during the war, not to mention the wilds of New Guinea in the earliest days of its air transport industry. Thanks to everyone who stopped by the recent MilHist A-Class Review and in advance to all who comment here! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:24, 16 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Support on prose per standard disclaimer. I've looked at the changes made since I copyedited this for A-class. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 03:33, 18 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Images are appropriately licensed and captioned. Nikkimaria (talk) 22:23, 24 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Comments Nice work as always Ian. I have the following comments:
- "after a brace of incidents" - "brace" sounds a bit odd in the lead. Could it be replaced with "pair" or "series" or similar?
- It isn't a particularly common word these days I grant you -- altered!
- "was posted to the 4th Light Horse Brigade as a private" - while this is what's in the source, you might want to double check it: I think that the light horse used cavalry ranks, so he was probably a trooper upon joining the unit (I could well be mistaken though!)
- I daresay you're right but I double-checked his service record and the one reference to his initial rank I could spot said private rather than trooper...
- "Holden claimed his first aerial victory while No. 2 Squadron was still flying DH.5s, before it began converting to Royal Aircraft Factory S.E.5s in December 1917" - do the sources give a date for when he claimed this victory?
- 'Fraid not, just that it was in a DH.5. You did highlight for me however that I should've had additional sources in there...
- "Formed at RAAF Point Cook, Victoria, it transferred to the newly opened RAAF Richmond, New South Wales, on 30 June" - given that Holden presumably wouldn't have travelled down to Melbourne to fly with this squadron in the week or so between his enlistment and its move, I'd suggest trimming this to just say that the squadron was located at Richmond from 30 June. Nick-D (talk) 00:41, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Support My comments have now been addressed. Nick-D (talk) 10:21, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Excellent article. Karanacs (talk) 21:46, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. --Laser brain (talk) 16:57, 6 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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