Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Jean Batten/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Buidhe via FACBot (talk) 11 March 2022 [1].

Jean Batten edit

Nominator(s): Zawed (talk) 09:25, 11 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

In a change from the military-themed articles I have previously brought to FAC, this article is about Jean Batten, an aviatrix of the 1930s. She made recording setting flights from England to Australia and then later England to New Zealand. Glamorous, driven, and ambitious, she was probably the most well known New Zealander of the 1930s but spent much of her later years as a recluse. I felt her article, as of mid-2020, didn't do her justice and have spent a lot of time, on-and-off, since then working on the article with a view to eventually bringing it to FAC. It went through the GA process in January and, having now attended to the addition of a map showing the flight path of one of her record flights, think it is ready for review at FAC. Thanks in advance to all those who participate in the review. Zawed (talk) 09:25, 11 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose based on FAC#4, length and summary style. At 12817 words, the article does not succeed at avoiding unnecessary detail by using summary style as required by the FA criteria. The important information ends up getting buried under walls of text. Compounding the matter, some sections are very long, making them difficult to read for viewers with smaller screens. To reduce the length, I would suggest splitting "Record attempts from England to Australia" into a separate article and summarizing it here. (t · c) buidhe 09:35, 11 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Well, that's disappointing. @Buidhe:, please withdraw this nomination. I think that the nature of the remedial work required is going to be such that it should be best done outside of the FAC process. Thanks, Zawed (talk) 10:15, 11 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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