Yalie123

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:30, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

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Nice start on your draft, but I have a few concerns

1. Keep in mind that articles about biomedical topics need to be based on recent review articles, not older research articles. This source (to pick one at random) meets neither of these criteria.
2. Since there's a separate daughter article on diet and cancer, a lot of what you want to add should be added to that page. The section on that topic of the cancer prevention article should remain at about its current length, but you should update it after you expand the diet and cancer article to make sure it's an up-to-date summary.
3. If you're going to comment on "trends", you need to make sure that you're reporting on what recent review articles have said.
4. References need to appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph.

Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:08, 15 November 2017 (UTC)