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Leavitt Peer Comments

Hi! Here are my comments on your working article! Hope it helps!

I am confused of the scope of this project-it is supposed to be a new subsection to a pre-existing article or a new article entirely? I looked to see and narrative therapy exists already-make sure pre-existing articles are linked for background information. For the sandbox, if this is being added to or editing a pre-existing article, maybe linking it would be helpful? The content is a bit unbalanced with most of the information pertaining to narrative therapy and only a few sentences for multi systemic therapy. Information is appropriately cited and linked to the bibliography. If this is a new article in itself, the lead section is missing in which all the information would be summarized.

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Daria Zaytseva Feedback

The references are good.

Feedback on multi-systemic therapy (look at CAPSLOCK)

"The model has shown success in sustaining long-standing improvements in children's and adolescents' antisocial behaviors (CITE). Families in MST have demonstrated improved family stability and (DELETE AND) post-treatment adaptability and (DELETE AND) growing support, and reduced conflict- hostility[4] (THE SENTENCE MAY BE BROKEN INTO 2)

The method's ultimate objectives include a) eliminating behavior problems, b) enhancing family functioning, c) strengthening the adolescents' ability to perform better at school and other community settings, and d) decreasing out of home placement [5] (GOOD!)

Feedback on narrative therapy (look at CAPSLOCK) Narrative Therapy: Narrative therapy has shown an increase in popularity in the field of family therapy. Narrative therapy developed out from the postmodern viewpoint, which is expressed in its principles: (a) not one universal reality exists, but socially constructed reality; (b) reality is created by language; (c) narrative maintains reality (d) not all narratives are equivalent [1](Freedman and Combs, 1996). (GOOD, ELIMINATE THE INTEXT CITATION)

Narrative family therapy views human issues from those roots as emerging and being sustained by dominant stories that control the life of an individual. Problems arise when individual stories do not match with their experience of living. According to the narrative viewpoint, by offering a new and distinct perspective[2] (THE SENTENCE IS NOT FINISHED)

In a problem-saturated narrative, therapy is a process of rewriting personal narratives. The process of rewriting the narrative of the client involves (a) expressing the problem(s) they are experiencing; (b) breaking down narratives that trigger problems through questioning; (c) recognizing special outcomes or occasions where a person has not been constrained by their situation; (d) connecting specific results to the future and providing an alternate and desired narrative; (e) inviting supports among the community to spectate the new narrative and (f) logging new document [2] (GOOOD) Since postmodern viewpoints prioritize concepts rather than techniques, in narrative therapy, formal methods are restricted. (WHICH FORMAL METHODS? ELIMINATE?) However, some researchers have described techniques that are useful in helping an individual rewrite a specific experience, like retelling stories and writing letters. (CITE? SOME RESEARCH HAS FOUND...)

Children admitted to a residential treatment center have behavior problems so extreme that residential treatment is their last hope (TOO INFORMAL). Parents seem to think the child is the problem needed to be fixed, and everything will be okay; on the other hand, the child generally sees him/herself as a victim (TOO INFORMAL). Narrative therapy enables these perspectives to be broken down and troubling behaviors of the child to be externalized, which could encourage both the child and the family members to achieve a new perspective no one feels prosecuted or blamed. [3]

Are you adding to the behavioral interventions section in the residential treatment article? Or will it be a new section? If adding to the behavioral interventions section I would suggest to keep it extremely short. Because there they are talking about behavioral interventions in general, and adding so much information on the narrative therapy I don't think would be ok for this wikipedia article.