Spence Defense
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editHey Charlie, David, and other group members who's names I did not inquire, Here are the edits I'm suggesting to your the section "Federal Level Protected Areas".
1. Capitalize the A in the word "area" of your title. This may seem like a minor change, but proper grammar is imperative. Your final page title should be "Protected Land Areas of the United States". 2."The United States Army Corps of Engineers is claimed to provide 30 percent of the recreational opportunities on federal lands, mainly through lakes and waterways that they manage." - This statement needs a citation. Where did you get it from? 3. In the first sentence of paragraph 3, you refer to the system of organization as "confusing". This term is not encyclopedic, and should be replaced by something less opinionated. You can describe it as complex or something of that sort. 4. In the final paragraph of this section, one sentence reads, "but that do not necessarily convey any protection..." Please correct the "do", it should be written to be "does". 5. It may also be beneficial to talk about the history of these sites. You could include who has historically had access to federally owned spaces, answering questions like, "Were Black people allowed to access Federally owned parks during Jim Crow Era?", "Which indigenous tribes were displaced to create space for the nation's most notable national parks?", "Who makes decisions that have to do with land management?". I think many of these questions will help guide your research. Please let me know if they are not relevant to your topic!
Best, Jibril — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jibrilkyser (talk • contribs) 01:06, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
Hi Jibril! The article my Sandbox is for is Green Jobs actually. You could probably just copy and paste what you wrote here on the talk page of Gino who's the one with the Sandbox in his group who are editing the "Protected areas in the United States" and just send a message to Garshaw about the mix-up. Best, Charlie Spence Defense (talk) 05:49, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
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- Thanks for the message Ian Spence Defense (talk) 00:25, 29 January 2017 (UTC)