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editAlthough you reference list looks good, I'm worried that they are not reflected in your article outline. much of your proposed structure does not seem specific to your fungus. The section on classification, for example, only talks about the phylum Ascomycota, which already has a pretty good Wikipedia article. Most students were assigned a fungus in the Ascomycota, and it would not be appropriate for everyone to include a paragraph on it. I suggest that you take a look at some of the developing articles of your classmates to get a better sense of what your content should be. Medmyco (talk) 14:43, 27 October 2013 (UTC)
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editHi,it looks like you've got a bit of a ways to go with your article, I'm sure you'll be adding more sections in the future. In terms of human infection, it might be a good idea to discuss how A.fulvescens can live on keratin-rich substrates. You could make a physiology section that discusses enzymes relevant to keratin digestion. Also, if there are case studies available, you could describe symptoms of disease, treatment,epidemiological data on how prevalent human infections are. I know we learned in class about how different dermatophytes also have animal hosts, if that's relevant to A. fulvescens, you could touch on that too. Good luck, I look forward to reading the final article:).Renatofrart (talk) 22:39, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
Peer review
editHi there. I think you have already started getting a sense of what you are missing and what you need to work on from the comments before mine. I would just like to add by suggesting that, you should start elaborating on your bullet points now, that could give you a better sense of what way your research is taking. Once you start writing paragraphs, you know which information you are looking for in your research and your research is also more goal directed. Also, as already pointed by the prof, you should make your search more specific to your fungi, rather than generally talking about the genus of your fungi. Hope this help's dude. All the best, it' not that though, we can do it :)Ria99 (talk) 00:29, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
Peer Comment
editHello! Thanks for your comments on my page! With regards to your article, I agree with Prof. Scott that you spend too much of the content focusing on details not specific to your fungus, especially in the classification section. I do think you do an effective job of discussing the pathogenicity mechanism. Have you tried using some secondary source materials as suggested in the assignment outline? Some that I found useful are:
Marr, edited by Johan A. Maertens, Kieren A. (2007). Diagnosis of fungal infections. New York: Informa Healthcare. ISBN 9781420017182.
Kayser, Fritz H. (2005). Medical Microbiology. Stuttgart: Georg Thieme Verlag. p. 369.
Perfect, edited by Mahmoud A. Ghannoum, John R. (2009). Antifungal Therapy. New York: Informa Healthcare. ISBN 9780849387869.
These should help you provide more detail in areas that others have already suggested such as symptoms, treatment, diagnosis and epidemiology. Best of luck with the rest of the article! Bmarz436 (talk) 02:46, 2 November 2013 (UTC)
Editing tips
editMake sure units are separated from numbers by a non-breaking space:
...optimum temperature for growth is 37 °C...
Also, make sure that your citations immediately follow punctuation, and that there is a space between the abbreviated genus name and the species epithet:
...is a member of the order Onygenales.<ref name=domsch1981/> Like other species of ''Aphanoascus'', ''A. fulvescens'' is strongly keratinophilic,<ref name=sigler2009/> capable of growth at high temperatures,<ref name=currah1985/> and...