Redhood1
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Humanpersonfromhere (talk) 19:57, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
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Peer Review
editHi Redhood1,
I was wondering if I can review your article. Let me know. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vasileios Kreouzis (talk • contribs) 17:58, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review on Neuroborreliosis
editSummary: In this article the author describes a CNS infection, namely Neuroborreliosis. In the introductory section the author introduces the causality, how the infection manifests in other organs, symptoms and the prognosis. Classification numbers of the disease are provided along with a structured table of contents to what will follow. The first section describes signs of onset and symptoms of the infection. Along with symptoms occurring in adults the differential signs of the disease in children are assessed. The next sections describes the diagnosis of the disease. Comorbidity among other disease and potential methods of diagnosis are described without extensive expansion. In the next section differential treatments among the US and Europe are presented, focusing on pharmacological and other therapies. In the next section titled epidemiology the authors states that lyme disease is the most common vector borne disease in the north hemisphere such as North America and Europe.
Major Points:
The first concern I had with this article is that it states that neuroborreliosis is a disorder of the CNS. From studying Lyme disease I understand that neuroboreliosis is a an temporal progression of lyme disease, meaning that it is not mutually exclusive with lyme disease. Additionally, in the lyme disease article of wikipedia it appears that this is extensively characterized as a temporal progression of lyme disease and not a sole manifestation of the infection.
As a model article for comparison I chose the toxoplasmosis and neurofibromatosis article of wikipedia. It seems that the author's article has followed the structure employed in other article with a few exceptions that would be interesting to be addressed. First, even if the author describes the cause in the surface in the author's introduction a section dedicated to the causation of the disease is not presented. Additionally, in the epidemiology section you don't provide epidemiological number and statistics, while the statement that lyme disease is the most common vector born disease is a bit general. Additionally, in the model articles it appears that their is a prognosis section. The author seems to touch on the prognosis in the introduction, but then he/she doesn't dedicate a section to describe the spatiotemporal progression of the infection in the CNS. Finally, a section dedicated to the pathology of the disease would complete this article. Other sections to consider include research on the disease and how different ticks affect the disease progression.
Minor Points:
An image of the infection in the CNS would be illustrative of the pathology. In the signs and symptoms section you could split the adult and children in two different subsections. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vasileios Kreouzis (talk • contribs) 16:32, 16 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
editIt's great that you used your literature review topic for the Wikipedia. I thought it was a really cool article, especially because I had never heard of this disease before. Overall, you have done a good job at presenting the information in a logical and easy to read manner. There are a few things that I noticed which you could fix to make it a better article. For instance, under the signs and symptoms section, you could expand on “sensory findings” as it is a bit unclear. It would be nice if you could provide a history section for Lyme disease. Lastly, you could hyperlink several terms in the article such as – lymphatic meningoradiculitis, encephalomyelitis, ELISA, western blot, and PCR. For the other two articles, I wasn’t sure if they are a part of your wikipage or separate articles that you have referenced, but you could perhaps rephrase the biography (early life and education) for Alfred Bannwarth. Once again, your article is otherwise in pretty good shape, so good job! TurquoiseOmega (talk) 20:07, 19 April 2017 (UTC)