Rebxlee
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editHello, Rebxlee, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:45, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
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editHi! I have some notes:
- The section should just be "All-China Women’s Federation", since the contributions part is assumed. This makes it more to the point. I've edited this for you.
- You don't really have to go into the history of women and feminism in China in this section, as this should be elsewhere in the article. This section should be specifically about the Federation as it applies to feminism. However that said, what you've written is very good. I think that it would actually be a good idea to turn this into a section on feminist movements in China and have the first paragraph be the introduction to the section. The Federation can then be a subsection. I'll edit this in your article to give you an example of what I mean.
- Some of the sourcing for this is a bit problematic. The China.org source just goes to the general organization's website - you'd need it to go to a page that explicitly states the claim that it's sourcing. This is especially important when it comes to the claim of the organization not representing all women, as someone may contest this, especially as China and feminism topics tend to be a little controversial at the least.
Other than that, I think that you're doing well here. I've done some editing in your sandbox to give you an idea of what I meant by some of the sections. I think that once you fix the sourcing, this could probably be moved live and worked on from there. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:47, 8 April 2019 (UTC)