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Latest comment: 6 years ago by RaginiGhosh in topic Peer Review - Ragini Ghosh

Peer Review - Nikita Iyer

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Hi Rachelle! It was so awesome to meet you in class today! I just wanted to tell you that I absolutely loved reading you ideas for your Area article! It was so cool to learn about Guatemalan Immigration into the US. I wanted to possibly give you some more thoughts and ideas to what else you could possibly include in your writing to strengthen your statements. There were a lot of areas in your writing where you could possibly use data and statistics or anything quantitative really to judge immigration among Guatemalans within the US. This could possibly lead into a comparison amongst other Latinxs populations as well as other races in general. You could also compare some before and after statistics on some of the statements comparing changes in immigration over periods of time. Furthermore, you could also possibly elaborate on what the distinctions are between Maya Indians and Guatemalans. When bringing them up as a new subsection, I wasn't entirely sure beforehand what the differences between those two were. Maybe potentially explaining their distinctions might help debate whether they should be considered refugees or not. Also, try to maintain a neutral perspective on some issues, such as the US failing to identify Maya Indians as refugees. You could possibly reorient this sentence as stating, "there is a lot of debate on whether Maya Indians should be considered refugees" to create a more neutral stance. With regards to your sector ideas, I thought you had a lot of great ideas on Illegal Immigration in the US! There was a lot of information specifically directed towards Guatemalans, which while it was very interesting to read, it sort of read like it was still a part of your area writing (which it very well could be!). With your sector, I would suggest to try to keep it more general and more inclusive of other cultures as well to create a more rounded understanding of how illegal immigration works in the US. Also, try to continue maintaining the encyclopedic tone by avoiding bias with certain topics, like undocumented workers and how they are "extremely vulnerable." Overall, you have a great start!

Peer Review Chloe Ciotti

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Area: You have a lot of good information on reasons why Guatemalans might have immigrated, I think a good way to structure it could be by history so talk about the specific event in time and how that may have caused them to want to leave Guatemala or have drawn them to the US. Also potentially you could do a section on the life of Guatemalan Americans like disparities they face or statistics of where they live or general things like that. You also talk about Mayan Indians being discriminated against by other Guatemalans and I think it could be helpful to maybe give information on what differentiates the two groups. Also is there still discrimination when they get to the US? There might not be research on that, just a thought.

Sector: For the first bit you have a lot of really good statistics for Guatemalans specifically that I think would be better for your area article. For sector look more into the statistics of various demographics of people who are immigrating. Also it could be interesting to have a section on barriers they face either while moving or once they are living in the US you mention barriers but it could be good to go a little more into detail. For example, language, social or cultural barriers, abuse of employers, lack of seeking medical attention because of fear of deportation etc. Also, a podcast you might be interested in is "Our Town" on This American Life that talks about illegal immigrant workers at a chicken factory and the discrimination they face but it also mentions that illegal immigrants actually make the government thousands of dollars (probably more I can't remember what it said) because employers deduct taxes directly from their paycheck but because they aren't recognized by the US they don't get a return on those taxes or any well-fare or reward. Another piece that could be interesting to look into is the different presidential policies around immigration. Reagan, HW Bush, Obama, and Trump all have shifted the laws on immigrants so could be cool to look into. If you're keen it could also be interesting to have a section on the barriers immigrants face when they are in the US, kinda similar to Guatemalan Americans but also with deportation and such. Also I'm not sure if this is neutral or would get flagged but if your interested maybe doing a section on immigrant rights in particular to ICE coming to their house and the detention centers they are held in before they are deported.

All of these are just thoughts i had so feel free to use or disregard them as you please! Good luck with writing the rest of your articles! Cciotti22 (talk) 08:08, 15 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review - Ragini Ghosh

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Hey Rachelle! I loved reading your articles in class this week! You had a lot of information both on your Area article 'Guatemalan Americans' and Sector article 'Illegal immigration to the United States' that helped me know more about the two topics separately but also in connection to each other. For your Area article, I think you have a decent amount of information on the background of Guatemalans immigrating to the United States, but I think you could also write more about the different peoples who came from Guatemala, in terms of which communities migrated to the United States. This is also in relation to the Cultural Section in your article where you write mostly about Maya Indians from Mexico and Guatemala, which makes me curious about the presence of other identities in Guatemala and if people from those other identities also immigrated to the U.S., and if it's hard to find literature on those people, maybe you could also explore why there's less literature on people other than Maya Indians from Guatemala? I also think you could write more about their economic status pre and post migration, any laws or recent news that specifically concern them. For your Sector article, I liked how you brought out the nuances of employment, laws, crime in the issue of illegal immigration. One part about writing on this topic that may be challenging is perhaps being extra cautious about the labels attached to policy towards illegal immigration, so I think you could look more into the "xenophobic" laws that you mention, wherein you could elaborate more on how and why they are xenophobic instead of writing that word. I enjoyed reading your articles and I look forward to seeing your articles live on Wikipedia! Please let me know if you have any questions!

RaginiGhosh (talk) 01:18, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply