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Shelby's peer review

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working parent review

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lead review

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neutrality notification

  • Intro sentence is too wordy and needs to be cleaned up grammatically.
  • Delete or their own needs from second sentence.
  • Final sentence establishes the intent to center on "gender inequality" for working parents.

Historic viewpoint review

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  • Extremely weak reference to television in the 1950's and 60's.
  • Entire section is subjective.
  • Lacks easily found statistics from the time period that would provide a better representation than comment about television and and extremely opinionated final sentence almost an insult. The entire sentence is unnecessary and weak.

Motherhood Penalty Fatherhood Bonus

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  • Last sentence needs a citation.
  • I would like a current statistic to back up the hemogenic masculinity statement, perhaps comparing not only to working mothers but also men that don't fit the mold.
  • The entire section feels subjective and unsubstantiated. Needs statistical support.

Working Mothers

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  • Entire section needs editing and grammatical revision. Mostly relevant information and interesting comparisons with European.
  • Consider breaking up information into time period and region.

Mommy Wars

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  • Unnecessary, poorly worded and irrelevant.

Working Father? Gay Parent?

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  • This article should either be titled working mother, or a sub-section should be added shining a light on the working father and possible obstacles/challenges they face.
  • Insight on Homosexual parents, either in a relationship or not, would also be an interesting sub-section to research.

Structure

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  • Article flow is confusing, grammatically inconsistent and poorly structured. Working mothers could be broken down better.
  • Motherhood Penalty section should come after historic viewpoints.

References

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  • Links do not all lead to proper source.
  • Content in article missing numerous citations.
  • Many sources written in a bias, subjective manner.

Shelby's Peer Review

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  • Proposed changes to lead are excellent. Informative but adds neutrality to the article.
  • Additions to Historical historical viewpoints are also excellent and relevant. Sources are strong.
  • Revisions are also strong, removing irrelevant, grammatically flawed content.
  • Additions to MpFb make section relevant. Strong.
  • Mommy wars still needs work.
  • More attention needs to be paid to Mommy Wars to keep it relevant.
  • Sub-section for working father, possibly focus on single-father dynamic, child-support/spousal support.
  • Possibly focus on the dynamic of working parents that lose their job and the issues associated with that.
  • Overall, fatherhood is underrepresented in an article titled Working Parent.
  • Most important item: Represent the working father, especially the one who falls outside of the heteronormative narrative.
  • There is little to no overlap our Working Parent and Chickenhead (sexuality).