User talk:Jeanettegome72/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Adelaas

Peer Review

Things you did really well: I thought you did an excellent job of making the article sections more succinct. You took out several unnecessary and repetitive sentences, which made the section much easier to read. You also did a great job of reducing the bias in the section. Even the sections where you just modified the language slightly changed the message of the sections from a biased perspective to a neutral one.

Things that could be improved: The most obvious way to improve the article, as you pointed out yourself in your note, is to add more reliable sources. As we know, Wikipedia articles are not supposed to reflect original research or opinions, so finding articles to back up those claims is really important. There are also a few points where you mention specific devices that Christine uses in her works. For example, you might list a few examples of the types of "issues of consequence" that the characters talk about. Additionally, you site "historical examples" in the second to last sentence of your last paragraph. Although you do not need to provide all of those specific examples, it might be helpful to include a little bit more detail: perhaps just mentioning the category of these historical examples, and whether they were saints and martyrs, etc. These added bits of detail would be helpful and give readers an even clearer idea of Christine's writing style.

Things I'll try to bring into my own article: I will definitely try to emulate your succinctness! It just makes the article a lot clearer and more user-friendly.

Adelaas (talk) 08:20, 16 May 2017 (UTC)Reply