Jaybreeze123
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:24, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
Peer Review edit
Hi Jay, Im Isabel from class and I will be doing your peer review.
History Section:
The history is strong with detailed facts about the evolution of the pluralistic ignorance. I would look at the organization of the first paragraph or a possible rewording to help readers understand what "literal attitude behavior inconsistency" is and its association to what pluralistic ignorance is. This is a slight issue but it would help improve clarity.
Causes of Divergence in Public vs. Private Opinion Section:
Introduction of the section could use some further detail to introduce the three causes.The three sections are strong though and they provide good examples. To strengthen these sections I would maybe look at providing other potential examples but could be left as is.
Consequences:
Organization wise, maybe consider making group think and bystander effect subheadings in this section-this is just a thought. You mention public issues at the beginning, look at potentially expanding this or maybe even making a section in this section delving deeper into current public issues.
Related Phenomena Section:
This section could use more sources or expansions, it just didn't feel as fleshed out as the reset of the article. Also be cautions of the language avoiding "we"-just a little thing.
Overall this is pretty solid, just don't forget to add images and proof read! Reading this was easy to understand as someone who is unfamiliar with the subject. I think that you have a good foundation and have a great idea of where you are going. Fleshing out those two sections (consequences and related phenomena) would be a good way to get it ready for final submission. Best wishes!