Ingensol

January 2020

I have reverted your move of Draft: Laurie Robinson Haden to a template talk page as this was incorrect and unhelpful (the draft is neither a template nor a talk page). Once you think the article is ready to be submitted for review you should use the process outlined at WP:AFC. However, I would recommend you do not do that with the article in its current state, as it will likely be rejected. It needs links to reliable, independent, secondary sources and it needs to be written so that its language is neutral and not promotional. You should also read wikipedia's conflict of interest guidelines and make sure you are abiding by them. Thank you Melcous (talk) 03:40, 9 January 2020 (UTC)

February 2020

Please do not move your draft to the mainspace of the encyclopaedia when it is clearly not ready. I have moved it to draft again, and as previously requested, used the WP:AFC process to submit it for review. As it stands, it is promotionally worded and improperly referenced. You have also not responded to the question about whether you have a conflict of interest. Thank you Melcous (talk) 06:44, 18 February 2020 (UTC)

February 2020

Thank you..I have no conflict of interest. I think Laurie Robinson Haden has had an amazing career and an big impact on diversity. After the edit can you check it before I publish? Ingensol (talk) 01:35, 19 February 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for clarifying. I can have a look at the draft and give you some feedback, but as previously said, rather than publishing the article yourself you should use the WP:AFC process to submit it for review. Some initial feedback for you as the draft now stands:

• There are external links (links to other websites) within the article which should be removed.
• The first two paragraphs talk about the organisation not the individual. As this is a biography of the individual person, that should be removed. (It is also worded promotionally, words like "focused on advancing diversity", "signature annual summit", "talent pipeline serve as an important resource" are the kinds of things organisations can say about themselves on their own website. They are not acceptable for a neutrally worded encyclopedia - there are more examples of this kind of unacceptable wording throughout the draft)
• I have added the reflist template which automatically puts references at the bottom of the article. The other references you have there should now be moved to the appropriate place within the draft to show which specific information that verify.
• All claims within the article need to be sourced to independent, reliable, secondary sources or they should be removed - so for example, currently there are no references at all in the early life and education or personal life sections, as well as multiple other statements that have no references.

There are other issues to be addressed but these are some suggested starting points. Melcous (talk) 02:49, 19 February 2020 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:Laurie Robinson Haden

Hello, Ingensol. It has been over six months since you last edited the Articles for Creation submission or Draft page you started, "Laurie Robinson Haden".

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Thank you for your submission to Wikipedia! UnitedStatesian (talk) 18:58, 1 September 2020 (UTC)