Funlovinfriend
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Hi Funlovinfriend, this is where I'll be leaving your peer review! First of all I want to say that I really enjoyed the additions you made to your article and I believe they added appropriate and important information to the article as a whole. You did a great job formatting to add the additional section for "On the Rocks" as well as seamlessly entering new information into other sections, such as "The Virgin Suicides." You also used relevant and up-to-date sources when adding information. As far as improvement goes, I think it would be beneficial to add a sentence about "On the Rocks" into the page's lead section, as it is just as relevant as the other movies included in this section. Also, while I like the information you added in each section, I think it could be a bit more concise. For the section on Coppola's added interests, instead of using dashes to separate your thoughts, use commas or separate sentences to avoid this grammatical error. As well, in your first sentence for "On the Rocks," I would suggest trying alternate wording so that you aren't using the same words multiple times in one sentence. Once again, in this section, I would suggest using an alternative grammatical tool instead of dashes. Also, when using the names of actors, it could be beneficial to link their Wikipedia pages as well! Overall, I think you made great changes and additions to the page!
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)