Bua327
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:15, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
Instructor Feedback for Draft edit
Overall, you are providing some good nuggets of contributions but there needs to be more depth throughout. Although you have added sources to bolster existing content, it most cases it was with only a single sentence. My recommendation is to add more depth in a new section and/or provide findings from recent studies within an existing section, such as CMC. The uncertainty reduction addition is good, but there could be more about what this theory is, how it is similar and different to social penetration theory, and what is productive about using the theories in tandem. I would be careful about making a claim about white people disclosing more than black people in general, but specifically it is inappropriate in this case because your citation supporting this claim does not say anything about racial differences. In fact, race of the participants is not reported in the article. Also, I would not use Ayres (1979) as a source because the study has many limitations, most notably the small non-representative sample of 24 female college students is not suitable for making sweeping generalizations about self-disclosure. Ultimately, there needs to be much more content added that is supported by more recent peer-reviewed journal articles (rather than secondary sources like the littlejohn and foss textbook). Jrpederson (talk) 19:29, 14 October 2020 (UTC)