Bethstrutz
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:29, 27 September 2018 (UTC)
Peer Review-Naomi Goldman edit
Mariposa16676 (talk) 23:00, 5 November 2018 (UTC)First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? It is a pretty good article that left me with no further questions.
What changes would you suggest the author(s) apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I think formatting a bit better can help. Some of the text is kind of warped weirdly.
What's the most important thing the author(s) could do to improve the article? I think this is a good article but it is slightly repetitive, especially in the lead. LGBTQ does not have to be explained twice in the same paragraph for example. I also wonder if it is now LGBTQ+ for this service? There also is a few grammar issues and different word choices that could be made to elevate it.
Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
Hi, my article is actually on Sarah Loguen Fraser! I'm guessing maybe you posted this on the wrong talk page? Bethstrutz (talk) 23:37, 10 November 2018 (UTC)