Anonymouse3042

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:02, 29 September 2020 (UTC)

Notes

Hi! I have some notes for you (saw your post on Ian's page). Overall the draft looks good, but there are some small tweaks I've made

• I changed this:

for her "whitewashing,"[2] or rather her approach to adding color pigment to walls,[4]

To this:

for her approach to adding color pigment to walls using whitewash

The reason for this is that it's more to the point and helps make it more clear that you're talking about the type of paint rather than the form of censorship.

• Be careful of the use of the word "even". It's a word that can be seen as a bit casual depending on its use. It was only used in one place and I changed it to also since it kind of flows a little better.

Other than that, I think that this is definitely ready to be moved live. You've done a good job with this! ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (｡◕‿◕｡) 05:08, 4 December 2020 (UTC)