User talk:Alice0129/sandbox

This seems like a good choice for an article to work on and your draft contains a good amount of information. I have a few suggestions for how you can improve the article before publishing it.

1. 1. I don't think the list of bullet points is a very conventional way of formatting your article. So I suggest doing away with this and writing paragraphs instead.
   2. Try to improve the writing style and grammar of your article. After you have taken another pass, send me another message and I can help with this.
   3. Use a high quality article on a similar kind of topic as an example to follow as you improve it. Maybe American Idol?
   4. There are some phrases that are unclear to me like how the contestant/trainees are "seated according to their goal." What is their goal? The article should be clear and understandable even to someone who has never heard of this show.

Try to improve these things and then ping me and I'll try to work together with you to improve the draft so you can publish it.

Groceryheist (talk) 00:54, 15 February 2019 (UTC)