User talk:ARoseWolf/Draft:Clan Mother

Article Name

This title is mostly commonly written as "Clan Mother". BradMajors (talk) 22:04, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

This article needs a complete rewrite (or should it be removed?)

This article needs a complete re-write in an encyclopaedic tone. Unfortunately, I don't know anything about the topic; I just happened to stumble onto the article, and removed one piece of obvious jokery (what some might call "vandalism" but I don't). I would like to fix the article completely, but I don't feel qualified. I'll look at it one more time.

Is it possible this isn't a notable topic? Perhaps the article should be deleted? Anybody?

--Ben Culture (talk) 20:46, 15 August 2012 (UTC)

It's a mess. Suggest WP:TNT. Leaving a note at the Indigenous Wikiproject to see if anyone wants to save it, otherwise, I'll delete it. Putting a prod on it now, as well. - CorbieVreccan ^☊ ☼ 21:13, 30 November 2022 (UTC)

Hopi sections needs a rewrite with other sources

Large parts of the section on Hopi clan mothers, quite frankly, seem more like some sort of odd feminist fantasy than a cohesive depiction of the society (even if it is completely accurate). The odd mentioning of a "standing army" and heavy overusage of quotes with incredibly large skips within them and many corrections from the source makes the whole paragraph both hard to read and to some extent even makes it seem suspicious.

Furthermore, it only actually mentions clan mothers as an aside in the very last sentence of the second paragraph. That seems like a rather undesirable thing in an article about clan mothers.

--Elearch (talk) 07:20, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

@Elearch odd feminist fantasy? wow! how archaic and derogatorily female of you! 21st century and people still think like you without doing their historical research??? 76.68.187.80 (talk) 13:48, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Userfied for cleanup

See discussion at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Indigenous peoples of North America#Clan Mother. - CorbieVreccan ^☊ ☼ 22:34, 30 November 2022 (UTC)

Tense issues

@A.S. Brown: please rewrite your additions to not past-tense living cultures, people and communities. If discussing something that was more common in the past and is less common now, we can use phrasings like, "Traditionally, " or "Historically, " etc. - CorbieVreccan ^☊ ☼ 20:21, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Additionally, the entire article has this problem in places. It needs to be cleaned up throughout, not made worse. - CorbieVreccan ^☊ ☼ 20:23, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

I have some books coming that may help me with this. It's going to take a few weeks to get them because it's winter and so difficult to get things delivered here but I'm really interested in studying the topic anyway. In the meantime I'm researching online and I'll make some changes as I go until I can get additional sources to verify some of the information in the article or give me different information to add. --ARoseWolf 18:46, 13 December 2022 (UTC)

Sources

Let's add some sources. Those that we know have content we need, or that might have some, or for sourcing things we know but need third party cites for.

• This article, while it has "blog" in the url, is on the official site for Mohawk Nation News (they use the "blog" section of the site for news updates and press releases). At the bottom of the page is a list of third-party sources - news outlets that have covered this story. I glanced at some of them and we could definitely use some of them for other points in the article besides this recent story.
  • MOHAWK MOTHERS GRANTED INJUNCTION OCT 27/22 Posted on November 16, 2022. kanien’kehá:ka kahnistensera (Mohawk Mothers), November 14, 2022. Update on next steps – Mohawk Mothers vs SQI et al.

"On Thursday October 27, 2022 at the Quebec Superior Court, Montreal District, the Kanien’kehá:ka Kahnistensera (Mohawk Mothers) made history as Justice Gregory Moore granted an interlocutory injunction to immediately halt “any excavation in furtherance of the redevelopment of the Allan Memorial Institute or the Royal Victoria Hospital” until the parties have completed discussions regarding the best archaeological practices to be used. ... This landmark decision was the first time in Canada that self-represented Indigenous people won an injunction without using attorneys and based on their own governance system, the Kaianerehkowa (Great Peace)." - CorbieVreccan ^☊ ☼ 20:05, 20 December 2022 (UTC)