Template:Did you know nominations/William Brydone Jack Observatory

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 23:05, 17 June 2014 (UTC)

William Brydone Jack Observatory edit

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... that the William Brydone Jack Observatory (pictured) in Fredericton, New Brunswick was the first astronomical observatory in British North America?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Wakatobi flowerpecker

5x expanded by HazelAB (talk). Self nominated at 23:37, 15 June 2014 (UTC).

The article seems fine: expanded fivefold, date is correct, no problems with content, nominator has already reviewed another article. However, the hook has too many blue links. First, I would remove "astronomical observatory", as everybody knows what is that. And second, saying "in modern Canada" would be more user-friendly than "in X political subdivision that does no longer exist". The article quotes a plaque that says that, "First Astronomical Observatory in Canada", it may be a good idea to do the same. Cambalachero (talk) 02:52, 16 June 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. How about one of these?
ALT1... that the William Brydone Jack Observatory (pictured) in Fredericton, New Brunswick was the first astronomical observatory in Canada?
ALT2... that the William Brydone Jack Observatory (pictured) in Fredericton, New Brunswick was the first astronomical observatory in British North America (modern Canada)?
- I suggest ALT2 because strictly speaking it wasn't in Canada when it was built, because Canada didn't exist yet.HazelAB (talk) 11:48, 16 June 2014 (UTC)
  - ALT2 seems fine Cambalachero (talk) 12:41, 17 June 2014 (UTC)