Template:Did you know nominations/The Flask, Hampstead

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 18:26, 16 March 2014 (UTC)

The Flask, Hampstead edit

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... that the five chromolithographs in The Flask, Hampstead (pictured), a London pub, are by the appropriately-named artist Jan van Beers?

Reviewed: Upper Flask

Created by Philafrenzy (talk), Edwardx (talk), Andrew Davidson (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 22:32, 7 March 2014 (UTC).

Article is new enough and long enough. QPQ done. Image is pd. Regarding the hook, I don't see the word "hand-coloured" in the reference; is it necessary?
While the article is certainly a "start", I don't understand why you didn't include more description of the architecture and fittings from footnote 1. This type of description is what's usually included in articles about listed buildings. Once you do that, you can remove the stub template, which anyway should be removed to qualify for DYK.
The sentences under History are very close to the source and should be rewritten in your own words. It's not enough to change a few words and leave the same sentence structure:
Source: By 1700 the trustees had organized a trade in bottled water from the Flask Tavern in Flask Walk; its London distribution at 3d a flask was arranged by Mr. Philips, an apothecary, from the Eagle and Child in Fleet Street. In April they advertised in the Postman that these chalybeate waters were taken by eminent physicians and many gentry who had previously drunk the Tunbridge waters.
Article: On the site stood the original Flask Tavern from where the trade in Hampstead mineral water was run from at least 1700. The distribution of the water, at 3d per flask, was arranged by Mr Philips, a London apothecary who operated from the Eagle and Child in Fleet Street. Advertising claimed that the water was drunk by many gentry and physicians who had previously consumed the Tunbridge waters.
Similarly, the first sentence under Flask Walk should be revised:
Source: The view is from the first-floor windows of Ginner's house at 61 Hampstead High Street
Article: The artist Charles Ginner's 1937 painting of the view from the first-floor windows of his house at 61 Hampstead High St ...
Yoninah (talk) 01:47, 11 March 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for the useful comments. I believe that I have now addressed all of them. As suggested, "hand-coloured" has been removed from the hook. Edwardx (talk) 13:27, 14 March 2014 (UTC)

Thank you. It looks very good now. No close paraphrasing seen. Hook ref verified and cited inline. I added the number "five" to the hook. Good to go. Yoninah (talk) 17:28, 15 March 2014 (UTC)