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The result was: promoted by — Maile (talk) 01:22, 17 February 2014 (UTC)
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The FP edit
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that The FP is a film based around a Dance Dance Revolution style video game in which people kill each other by winning dance-offs?
- Reviewed: Kewsi Nyantakyi
Created by Corvoe (talk). Self nominated at 16:47, 5 February 2014 (UTC).
- Well referenced, AGFing there are no copyright concerns, long enough and new enough. Only issue I see is that the hook "people kill each other" is not in the article. I've read it, and searched on several close phrasing alternatives. Can you check on that?--v/r - TP 03:52, 14 February 2014 (UTC)
- Added a blip in "Production" where the Trost brothers are asked how they die playing the game, and that they left it unexplained because they found it funnier. Should I reword it to "in which people die after losing a dance-off?" Corvoe (speak to me) 02:27, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Kill and death and really separate things. I read an article about a man who died after winning a cockroach eating competition [1]. I wouldn't say the other competitors killed him by losing. Can you rephrase either the article or the hook to make them match a little better?--v/r - TP 02:32, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- I'm not sure what you're looking for now. I explicitly stated that they die of something called a "187" when they are defeated. I'm not sure what I'm wording wrong. Corvoe (speak to me) 03:42, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- To clarify, I'm suggesting changing the hook to'
ALT1: ... that The FP is a film based around a Dance Dance Revolution style video game in which people die after losing a dance-off?Corvoe (speak to me) 03:45, 15 February 2014 (UTC)- Looks better. Did you want to include "187" in the hook as well for the "what the crap?" factor?--v/r - TP 18:42, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that The FP is a film based around a Dance Dance Revolution style video game in which people die of a "187" after losing a dance-off?
Like that? Corvoe (speak to me) 04:52, 16 February 2014 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that The FP is a film based around a Dance Dance Revolution style video game in which people die of a "187" after losing a dance-off?
- Looks better. Did you want to include "187" in the hook as well for the "what the crap?" factor?--v/r - TP 18:42, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Kill and death and really separate things. I read an article about a man who died after winning a cockroach eating competition [1]. I wouldn't say the other competitors killed him by losing. Can you rephrase either the article or the hook to make them match a little better?--v/r - TP 02:32, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Added a blip in "Production" where the Trost brothers are asked how they die playing the game, and that they left it unexplained because they found it funnier. Should I reword it to "in which people die after losing a dance-off?" Corvoe (speak to me) 02:27, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Well referenced, AGFing there are no copyright concerns, long enough and new enough. Only issue I see is that the hook "people kill each other" is not in the article. I've read it, and searched on several close phrasing alternatives. Can you check on that?--v/r - TP 03:52, 14 February 2014 (UTC)
