Template:Did you know nominations/Summer Rayne Oakes

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:25, 19 July 2019 (UTC)

Summer Rayne Oakes edit

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Summer Rayne Oakes in 2018

~~... that Summer Rayne Oakes became known as "the world's first eco-model" due to only modeling clothes from organic or recycled materials?~~ Source: "Summer Rayne Oakes the “Hottest Eco-Model.” The choice was easy; she pretty much owns the category. But she does it with style: Oakes only models clothing made from organic or recycled materials." https://grist.org/article/sabel/; "Oakes, who is known as "the world's first eco-model," http://www.vancouversun.com/story_print.html?id=1570166 ; "To date, Oakes has turned down six large cosmetics campaigns and is internationally regarded as the eco model." https://www.theguardian.com/environment/2010/oct/24/innovator-summer-rayne-oakes-sustainable-design
- ALT1:~~... that model Summer Rayne Oakes inspired the Toyota Prius C, lives in a Brooklyn apartment with over 600 plants, and co-wrote two papers on sewage sludge?~~ Source: "Summer Rayne Oakes, a 34-year-old activist, nature blogger and fashion model with degrees in environmental science and entomology who lives with some 700 plants in her Brooklyn apartment. Ms. Oakes may be the original plant influencer: In 2012, the makers of the Toyota Prius designed the subcompact Prius C with Ms. Oakes in mind" https://www.nytimes.com/2018/11/08/style/08SILL.html; "Oakes enrolled at Cornell in 2000, where she went on to publish papers with Harrison on sludge toxicity ....(Oakes guarantees, “I’m the only model ever to have published a paper on the health-related effects of sewage sludge in a scientific journal.”)" https://grist.org/article/sabel/

Reviewed: InvisiblePeople.tv
Comment: If I didn't have a length shortage, I'd combine the two hooks. Or more: Summer Rayne is her real name; she lives with a chicken that she takes on the New York City subway to modeling assignments... No shortage of "hooks" for this article!

Moved to mainspace by GRuban (talk). Self-nominated at 19:35, 21 May 2019 (UTC).

I like the first hook (eco-model). The alternate is quirky, but I don't think it's as notable? The sources for the eco-model hook are good. Picture in article is from commons. I don't see any copyright issues. Originally written a while ago, but moved to the main space on May 20, so counts as recent. Looks good to me. Thanks for writing this article! QuakerSquirrel (talk) 19:18, 23 May 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I came by to promote ALT1, but the hook needs a few more words to make it grammatically correct, and then it closely paraphrases the source:
ALT0a: ... that Summer Rayne Oakes became known as "the world's first eco-model" because she only models clothes made from organic or recycled materials?
Here's the source:
Oakes only models clothing made from organic or recycled materials. Yoninah (talk) 22:56, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

I'm fine with the change. --GRuban (talk) 00:24, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

@GRuban: what do you mean? You are copying the source both in the hook and the article. Yoninah (talk) 14:30, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

Ah; your objection is that it's too close a paraphrase? Honestly, I don't think there is a way to convey the meaning in a less close paraphrase. It's not that long a sentence, there aren't that many ways to say it. The items that need to be covered are

Summer Rayne Oakes
is called "the world's first eco-model"
due to only modeling organic/recycled clothes

If you can think of any single sensible sentence that contains all three points, and you consider it a less close paraphrase than the current, I will likely be happy with it. If you can't think of one, then I have to take that as evidence there isn't really another way to say it, and run with it as is. --GRuban (talk) 14:40, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

OK, I've thought about it and the only thing I could suggest is replace "materials" with "fabrics". But "materials" is more generic, so I'm conceding to ALT0a based on WP:LIMITED. Restoring tick per QuakerSquirrel's review. Yoninah (talk) 22:05, 14 July 2019 (UTC)