Template:Did you know nominations/Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Z1720 (talk) 01:41, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
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Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon
50 Cent in 2007
- ... that rapper 50 Cent (pictured) served as executive producer for rapper Pop Smoke's debut album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon, after the latter was shot and killed at the age of 20 during a home invasion? Source:Billboard
- Reviewed: Brandon Kintzler
Improved to Good Article status by The Ultimate Boss (talk). Self-nominated at 22:51, 6 April 2021 (UTC).
- @The Ultimate Boss: Before I review, may I suggest that you completely re-write this hook. You make it seem as if 50 Cent was shot and killed in a home invasion. Also, phrases like "debut posthumous studio album" which are mandatory in articles, are considered superfluous in DYK hence why they don't need to be included. Consider writing this hook: "... that after Pop Smoke's sudden death during a home invasion, 50 Cent took it upon himself to finish the former's debut album, Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon, on his behalf." or something along those lines. HeyitsBen talk 08:22, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
- HeyitsBen Changed to "the latter". ShootForTheStars (talk) 08:42, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
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- This hook simply states the executive producer of a posthumous album and the reason of death... nothing much. I suggest that you spice it up by including the fact that 50 Cent "curated" Pop's album "took it upon himself" to finish it after his death, which the Billboard source supports already.
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HeyitsBen talk 09:52, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
- Pinging nominator @Shoot for the Stars: this was reviewed over a month ago and the issues above need to be resolved before this can be promoted. DanCherek (talk) 21:55, 16 May 2021 (UTC)
- Nominator says he's semi-retired, but since the concern is hooks, I'll suggest some for @HeyitsBen, DanCherek, and Shoot for the Stars:. Kingsif (talk) 12:07, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that Pop Smoke's first album, Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon, was released nearly six months after he died?
- ALT2: ... that the cover art of trap album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon depicts a flower made of metal to signify a permanent memorial to its deceased rapper Pop Smoke?
- ALT3: ... that tracks on Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon include vocals from a dead man and a felon on the telephone?
- ALT4: ... that the release date of trap album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon was postponed out of respect for Black Lives Matter?
- ALT5: ... that critics have disagreed on whether Pop Smoke, who died during production of his album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon, would have been proud of the result?
- Kingsif (talk) 12:05, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
- The Ultimate Boss, can you please return and comment on the proposed hooks? DanCherek, do any of them meet with your approval? This nom has been languishing for weeks now! MeegsC (talk) 11:06, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Approve ALT1 (but change "six months" to "five months") and ALT5 as the ones that sound most interesting to me. Disclaimer: I have only evaluated these hooks and that they are cited inline in the article; I am deferring to the original review from Cybertrip [HeyitsBen] for other aspects like copyvio, general sourcing, etc. DanCherek (talk) 12:04, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
- The Ultimate Boss, can you please return and comment on the proposed hooks? DanCherek, do any of them meet with your approval? This nom has been languishing for weeks now! MeegsC (talk) 11:06, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
- Nominator says he's semi-retired, but since the concern is hooks, I'll suggest some for @HeyitsBen, DanCherek, and Shoot for the Stars:. Kingsif (talk) 12:07, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
