Template:Did you know nominations/Roger Wilbraham (MP)
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:09, 3 November 2014 (UTC)
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Roger Wilbraham (MP) edit
- ... that Roger Wilbraham (pictured left) probably admired the Venus de' Medici statue in the 1770s?
- Reviewed: Golden Hall (Stockholm City Hall)
Created by Victuallers (talk). Self nominated at 22:33, 18 October 2014 (UTC).
- The opening of the "Life" section is nonsensical to anybody who doesn't already know the family history: "Wilbraham was born on 30 December 1743 at Townsend House in Welsh Row in Nantwich. The house had been built by Roger Wilbraham and his father was also called Roger. Roger junior had an elder brother called George and another brother named Thomas. His father who was from Nantwich and his mother Mary (born Hunt) sent their son, Roger, to Trinity College, Cambridge." (I don't think DYK rules actually demand that the article shouldn't cause cerebral collapse, but I think we should avoid the possibility of a scandal; '"Wikipedia Imploded My Husband's Brain!" says Generic Kardashian'; I added the Kardashian for tabloid appeal.) Belle (talk) 11:23, 22 October 2014 (UTC)
- Increased the readability by a milliKardashian! Do feel free to edit and thanks for spotting the gibberish Victuallers (talk) 09:23, 23 October 2014 (UTC)
I fixed some spelling, added some wikilinks to explain various things (stone weight, Inner Temple, MA, etc) and smoothed a bit of the prose. I think the refs to the books could be better (that is, have proper citations and not just links to google books) but otherwise, it is interesting, well referenced and I think good to go. A suggestion for an alternative hook could be "that ... was probably painted admiring the Venus de' Medici". I also think it would be better for the layout if the image of the whole painting was underneath the detail shown in the infobox (to make the context clearer) and the engraving moved left but it's a matter of opinion and aesthetics. Whiteghost.ink (talk) 03:26, 1 November 2014 (UTC) :thanks for unsticking this! Do feel free to fix the aesthetics too, I moved to traditional place. Cheers. Victuallers (talk) 15:58, 1 November 2014 (UTC)
