Template:Did you know nominations/Popcorn Khao! Mast Ho Jao
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Fuebaey (talk) 15:45, 2 January 2015 (UTC)
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Popcorn Khao! Mast Ho Jao edit
- ... that the 2004 romantic comedy Popcorn Khao! Mast Ho Jao was Kabir Sadanand's directorial debut?
- ALT1:
... that when Kabir Sadanand told the name of his film to his friends, they called him mad? - Reviewed: Achhe din anne wale hain
- Comment: The article contained copyio before it was expanded. After it was removed the article had only 371 characters of readable prose size and now it has 3335 characters.
- ALT1:
5x expanded by Skr15081997 (talk). Self nominated at 09:50, 14 December 2014 (UTC).
- I'll take this. Vanamonde93 (talk) 09:26, 21 December 2014 (UTC)
5x expansion checks out once the copyvio is accounted for, which is fine. Nominated within the stipulated time period. QPQ complete. Hook is fine; I would stick with the original hook as ALT1 is a little colloquial.
- There are, however, a couple of issues with language; I would recommend a thorough copy-edit, because there are places where the meaning is obscured. Serbian "modal," referring to Patcy without saying who that may be, etc. I would particularly tweak the last-but-one sentence of the lead to something like "after watching the completed film, Sadanand felt it could have been a lot better." or something along those lines. I would perform the CE myself, but that would put me on dodgy territory with this review, so I won't do that. Vanamonde93 (talk) 14:52, 22 December 2014 (UTC)
- @Vanamonde93: I have copy-edited the article and struck the ALT hook. Thanks.--Skr15081997 (talk) 15:04, 24 December 2014 (UTC)
This is GTG; no close paraphrasing issues that I can find. Other criteria addressed above. Vanamonde93 (talk) 17:37, 31 December 2014 (UTC)
- There are, however, a couple of issues with language; I would recommend a thorough copy-edit, because there are places where the meaning is obscured. Serbian "modal," referring to Patcy without saying who that may be, etc. I would particularly tweak the last-but-one sentence of the lead to something like "after watching the completed film, Sadanand felt it could have been a lot better." or something along those lines. I would perform the CE myself, but that would put me on dodgy territory with this review, so I won't do that. Vanamonde93 (talk) 14:52, 22 December 2014 (UTC)
