- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 15:56, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
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Pheng Xat Lao edit
- ... that the music of Pheng Xat Lao was retained when its lyrics were changed in 1975?
- ALT1:... that although the lyrics of Pheng Xat Lao were changed in 1975, its music was retained?
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- Comment: The promoter can interchange "music" for "tune"; whichever one sounds better.
5x expanded by Bloom6132 (talk). Self nominated at 00:28, 9 May 2013 (UTC).
- I would propose a slightly different hook to indicate what 1975 means here. Also, the title should be in quotation marks. Drmies (talk) 14:13, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
- ALT1: ...that after the 1975 end of the Laotian Civil War the lyrics to the national anthem of Laos, "Pheng Xat Lao", were changed but the music remained the same?
Tick, though it's barely long enough at roughly 2000 characters up from 370 or so. Really, this needs a little bit of expansion to be decent, not just passable--if I were the author/expander, I'd use Raffin, Holt, and St. John to beef up the differences between the two versions and the reason for the change. St. John notes the regime "adjusted to existing realities" (as if there are unexisting realities?), which would make for a much more interesting discussion. A few examples of word choice and a note on colonialism, and the "wonderful irony" in the first version noted by Raffin, would make this a very interesting article rather than a somewhat dry and factual one: this is all about ideology. So I'm leaving the templated "problem" message on the author's talk page to prod them a bit into making this something they can be really proud of. Drmies (talk) 14:27, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
