Template:Did you know nominations/Moston Brook

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:22, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

Moston Brook edit

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Moston Brook

... that Moston Brook was one of the most polluted waterways in Greater Manchester but, following improvements, it is now a recreational resource for local residents? Source: https://www.local.gov.uk/oldham-cleaning-moston-brook and http://www.manchester.gov.uk/download/meetings/id/2574/download_the_report_-_waterways
- ALT1:... that Moston Brook once had "white hills" along its banks? Source: https://www.oldham.gov.uk/download/downloads/id/1961/feasibility_study.pdf

Created by Delusion23 (talk). Self-nominated at 19:50, 13 March 2019 (UTC).

Reviewed: Sabine Hyland

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: The article is long enough and compliant with policy; the image looks good and QPQ is done. I prefer the main hook to ALT1 because it is more descriptive, the contrast between once-polluted and recreation is interesting, and readers probably do not know what the "white hills" mentioned in ALT1 are. In the main hook, I'd suggest a rephrasing of "but due to improvements is now" to "but following improvements, it is now" as the original construction reads slightly awkwardly and was missing a comma (which I inserted). Maybe the types of improvements can also be specified, but I'm content with leaving that part as it is. ComplexRational (talk) 23:39, 17 March 2019 (UTC)